Question

Could someone help revise my outline and thesis? Thank you.

Answer 1

I have to use this website-- http://www.tommarch.com/electraguide/thesis.php

Heres what it made for my thesis-- Even though parents feeling anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college and that some graduates might not ever go to college after taking a year off, I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college, a graduate can travel, relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition because explore other interests they might have and instead of going right into school graduates should do more research on colleges and learn more about a particular field of study they would like to major in.

Answer 2

The questions it asks on the website---
What's the topic you want to write about?-
high school graduates should take a year off before entering college

What's your main opinion on this topic?
I believe high school graduates should take a year off before entering college, a graduate can travel, relax after doing 12 years of school, volunteer/intern, or work to save up money for tuition

What's the strongest argument supporting your opinion?
instead of going right into school graduates should do more research on colleges and learn more about a particular field of study they would like to major in

What's a second good argument that supports your opinion?
explore other interests they might have

What's the main argument against your opinion?
parents feeling anxious and uncertain of their child not going straight into college and that some graduates might not ever go to college after taking a year off

What's a possible title for your Essay?
- I dont have one yet

Answer 3

Is that your thesis statement?

Answer 4

Yeah.. It needs work.. The website I listed above creates a thesis and outline for me. I have to use it for another assignment with my essay. But im having trouble

Answer 5

Find the part of it that sounds the most like you're saying the statement. The sentence that really drives the thought home

Answer 6

Huh?