Question

Could someone check over my thesis statement on "Japanese American Internment Camps" Will Medal

Answer 1

Coming to America in the late 1800's many Japanese believed they would start a new prosperous life in America. As the years went on they weren't going to get the life they truly wanted. After the surprising attack on the Pearl Harbor. With constant spreading of how the Japanese Americans knew about the ordeal, President Roosevelt had to take action. "On Thursday, February 19, 1942, President Roosevelt issued the Executive Order 9066, which called for an evacuation of Japanese Americans on the west coast with the excuse of a “military necessity.” The government’s hasty enforcement of Executive Order 9066 in reaction to public hysteria, not only violated the rights of Japanese Americans, but also resulted in unnecessary effort and attention towards the internment camps." (History.com)

Answer 2

looks legit to me

Answer 3

@kmullis6
@Astrophysics (I know you do math but thought you could help here too)

Answer 4

@whiteboyisrad should I add anything?

Answer 5

hmmm I honestly don't know you want a second opinion tho

Answer 6

you may wanna change weren't to were not

Answer 7

its the same thing

Answer 8

are you presenting it?

Answer 9

not orally

Answer 10

just writing it then turning it in

Answer 11

ok never mind then ^.^