Question

Is there anyone here who could proofread 2 paragraphs for my Interpersonal Communication class ?

Answer 1

I could help you!

Answer 2

Ok here is the prompt


After reading chapter 1, brainstorm competent and incompetent communication of important people in your life. List & explain thinking patterns (meeting new people is fun), behaviors (speaks clearly), and characteristics (friendly) of a competent communicator; and then, list & explain the same things for an incompetent communicator.

This is what I have so far.


The most competent communicators that I can think of are the announcers from the podcast “The Partially Examined Life”. One of the most impressive qualities of their discussions is a very well developed sense of interaction coordination. The complexity of their range of subject matter, communicated in a way that allows for a person with no experience in philosophy whatsoever, to be able to mostly understand and enjoy, is quite satisfying. They express their ideas with modesty but also passion, respect, as well as critique, and clarity of some very complicated ideas.
I would list, as an example of an incompetent communicator, myself. I seem to struggle with the idea of a “canned plan”. Something feels very odd to me about the process of actively, (and with intention) making conversation somehow formed to a previously determined format. In some instances the process seems quite natural however, adapting to cultures with varying degrees of expectation regarding introversion, extroversion or particular characteristics of behavior has always been a challenge for me. I find it sometimes difficult to decode the conversation that a person is setting forth. I think that this has much to do with my lack of the understanding of context that is so continually redefined by our cultures of media, as well as the many cultures of tradition or ethnicity.

Answer 3

Trying too hard? Simplify and create clarity.

"The complexity of their range of subject matter, communicated in a way that allows for a person with no experience in philosophy whatsoever, to be able to mostly understand and enjoy, is quite satisfying."

I forgot what the sentence was about by the time I got all the way to the last three words.

"to mostly understand"

Some people still hate split infinitives.

"to be able to mostly understand and enjoy"

This could be a stronger statement. I don't know what "mostly" means. 51% 95% maybe 23%, but that is more than expected?

"somehow formed to a previously determined format"

Probably try to avoid alliteration. It's distracting. Change either "formed" or "format", I would think.

" that a person is setting forth"

This is just useless trash. Leave it out.

" context that is so continually redefined "

This assumes facts not in evidence. Where did we establish that this is so?

Not bad. It appears that you have an opinion. I could read that. Good work.