Question

The Girl Who Leads Me
The world is dark like always. I can feel a hand leading me. Her voice is sharp and I hate it. I hate her. I have to trust her. She is the girl who leads me.

Answer 1

@kohai

Answer 2

It's nice and simple. I'd format it more like a poem, though. Leave out punctuation and make each line it's own line, like this.

The Girl Who Leads Me
The world is dark like always
I can feel a hand leading me
Her voice is sharp and I hate it
I hate her
I have to trust her
She is the girl who leads me

Answer 3

Its only a rough draft I'm working on fixing it so...

Answer 4

I understand. I would focus on the word choice etc and make it more flowery. But if you're writing a poem, it should be formatted like a poem, you know? :)

Great job so far. I'm terrible at writing poetry, your draft is way better than what I could do lol