Question

Can someone check if this sentence is correctly punctuated?

Answer 1

Optimism left me a thought, "Maybe it will not be so bad," before he deserted me; not even he desired to be here in this scalding inferno.

Answer 2

Comma after here

Answer 3

not even he desired to be here (pause) in this scalding inferno

Answer 4

o.o Are you sure? I don't pause there though.

Answer 5

Sometimes, commaʻs can be done not just for grammatical reasons, but for an author wanting to establish a certain structure for the sentence. Idk, it just might be my style to have a pause there, and thatʻs fine as it doesnʻt violate anything but just changing the structure slightly

Answer 6

Oh okay, so the sentence is grammatically correct?

Answer 7

Seems to be

Answer 8

Thanks!