Can someone check if this sentence is correctly punctuated?

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jojokiw3 · Answer

Optimism left me a thought, "Maybe it will not be so bad," before he deserted me; not even he desired to be here in this scalding inferno.

shadowlegendx · Answer

Comma after here

shadowlegendx · Answer

not even he desired to be here (pause) in this scalding inferno

jojokiw3 · Answer

o.o Are you sure? I don't pause there though.

shadowlegendx · Answer

Sometimes, commaʻs can be done not just for grammatical reasons, but for an author wanting to establish a certain structure for the sentence. Idk, it just might be my style to have a pause there, and thatʻs fine as it doesnʻt violate anything but just changing the structure slightly

jojokiw3 · Answer

Oh okay, so the sentence is grammatically correct?

shadowlegendx · Answer

Seems to be

jojokiw3 · Answer

Thanks!