Question

can come one pleas help me review my assignment I have written a story and I just need revising helllp pleas!!!!!!!!

Answer 1

sure, i'll help as much as i can

Answer 2

hello?

Answer 3

yes omg thank you should I just post what iv written and you let me know what I should fix?

Answer 4

Yes

Answer 5

As Lady Macbeth gets everyone seated she rushes to the kitchen to finish up the food to be ready and served for the dinner. At the head of the table is seated Macbeth and on both of his sides is his two best companions Ross and Lenox and down the table are some of his noblemen. Lady Macbeth then goes into the kitchen and starts serving the food, hoping everything turns out successful.

“I hope everyone enjoys this lovely dinner and food in the honor of King Macbeth”, while pouring them each a glass of wine.

“Cheers” everyone chanted

“ To Macbeth” says Ross

As everyone had their glasses up to the toast Lady Macbeth looks towards Macbeth as he looks lifeless. “Macbeth?”. He looked up at Lady macbeth lost and out of his head, but noticed everyone staring, Making him more nervous looking than ever.

“Cheers!! lets all enjoy” Replied Macbeth still with the face of looking frightened.

Lady Macbeth found it a bit strange, but she continued with the toast and serves the rest of the dinner. And as she passed Macbeth he whispers to her “He's here” in the most chilling voice that made her hairs on her back stand up. Lady Macbeth stood there confused and scared and replied “What?, Who?”

Get him out!!! Get him out!!! Said Macbeth, What he was seeing in front of his eyes was Banquo.

“Please Macbeth calm down” said Lady Macbeth she grabbed him and took him aside. “What has gotten into you? “

“He's here Banquo is here, He's here to kill me “ He replied with sweat coming down his face and his eyes nearly watering.

“Relax, Macbeth he's not here don't do this now!! You can't let people here you, do you want them to find out? do you want to loose all that you’ve worked for? don't let it get to you please you can't throw it all away, It's unfair to me!!!!” All Lady Macbeth could think about was her not getting caught she could not bare to lose everything all because of Macbeth's little scare.

“But….But He wants to taunt me he gave me the most chilling smile along with a laugh of evil” said Macbeth

“Stooooop!!! Get yourself together, look at everyone here for you you can't disappoint them now. Just imagine what they will think of you if you tell them they will think you're crazy, do you want that ?” replied Lady Macbeth

At that point Macbeth got himself together and agreed with Lady macbeth to go back to the dinner table. Everyone looked at him so confused, and a little weirded out by what had just happened.

“Are you okay? Is everything fine” asked Lenox

“Yes of course i'm just a little stressed” Macbeth replied

“Well then CHEERS, to Macbeth” Everyone chanted

“To what's to all the great yet to come in the future for the great king Macbeth ” added Lady Macbeth

Everyone was still a little off of what had just happened and how Macbeth just got a bit crazy and out of his mind but everyone went along with Lady Macbeth. Macbeth then still a bit shaken up put his glass up, and without saying a word he pointed his cup up. Everyone followed along, as he nodded his head and took a drink.

“Enjoy this lovely dinner, and dig in “ said Lady Macbeth

Then from there everyone began to eat and smiled,conversated among each other and laughed. It was as if that whole scene didn't happen.

The dinner was somewhat successful Lady Macbeth chanted in her head and smiled, while she sat and at the dinner table with everyone. As she sat she looked at Macbeth Smiled tosted her cup to him and began to enjoy the dinner.

Answer 6

do you want to overload on sensory details, because the first sentence could include why Lady Macbeth goes to rush out of the kitchen. Maybe she stood there for a few seconds but the faint smell of burning tickled her nostrils, so she rushed out the room, belatedly realizingn that ladies walked, not ran?

Answer 7

so like adding more details to like emphasize what's happening?

Answer 8

yes, that's what I mean

Answer 9

At the head of the table is Macbeth, and on both sides his two best companions Ross and Lenox. Down the table are more of Macbeth's noblemen, and each of them has the hunger of a impatient man. Lady Macbeth left quietly for the kitchen, returning to serve the food. As she did, she fervently hoped all would go well.

Answer 10

"For the King!" She rose her cup with a dramatic flourish, managing not to spill. "Enjoy this ale in the name of his majesty, your King Macbeth, and feast on our turkey."
"Ugh."
"Meat is meat," she reminded him, well aware of their dislike for turkey.
(sorry about the turkey part, i know it is kind of weak)

Answer 11

sorry i don't know what word to use in replacement, but you really shouldn't use cheers.

Answer 12

Lady Macbeth was not a woman to shirk her duties, and she certainly was not stupid enough to mistake what she needed to do. Blood would spill… unless she moved Agnes away from the Laird of (name). Lady Macbeth gestured the laird away from Agnes, though it took firm shoves for the mule to move. Lady Macbeth seated everyone and waited a full second for the food to fly. Then the faint smell of something wrong tickled her, so she rushed out of the room, belatedly realizing that queens walked, not ran.
At the head of the table is Macbeth, and on both sides his two best companions Ross and Lenox. Down the table are more of Macbeth's noblemen, and each of them has the hunger of a impatient man. Lady Macbeth returned quietly from the kitchen. She prayed between turkey legs that all would end well. Wait, prayed? She was Lady Macbeth, Queen of Scotland. This would work.
"For the King!" She rose her cup with a dramatic flourish, managing not to spill. "Enjoy this ale in the name of his majesty, your King Macbeth, and feast on our turkey." "Ugh." "Meat is meat," she reminded him, well aware of their dislike for turkey. "Now that is not the correct enthusiasm for your king."
“To Macbeth” says Ross
As everyone had their glasses up to the toast Lady Macbeth looks towards Macbeth as he looks lifeless. “Macbeth?”. He looked up at Lady macbeth lost and out of his head, but noticed everyone staring, Making him more nervous looking than ever.

Answer 13

one important thing to remember is that lady macbeth is very confident, so some stuff is useless