Question

can someone plz help me with my essay
i have to make some correction if you could help it be great

Answer 1

@Jaynator495

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@jennyguerrero

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@AlexandervonHumboldt2

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@Barrelracing

Answer 5

you are muslim like me

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actually i need help with my structure

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i mixed up some things i guess

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@TorilovesVampires can you look at my essay

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Sure

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k

Answer 11

Your essay looks good what seems to be the problem

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ok so i guess i am mixing all the information in my intro paragraph

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like i am not using my proper thesis

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i guess so

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I think it looks great

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lol hell no

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i show that essay to my teacher and we want to make some changes

Answer 18

he said you totally mixed up

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Try to put your strongest points in the first paragraph

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So your reader gets interested in what you are writing

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ok so what you want me to change there

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are you looking at it

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he also said that some of your sentences doesn't make any sence

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Yea I'm going to look at it a couple more time to see

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yeah thnx

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do you have a gmail

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I have a email

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what is it

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i will share that document with you and then we can both work together

Answer 30

how is that sound>>

Answer 31

Okay Aniything to help you in your studies

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I'm joking

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lol