Question

can someone proof read my history paper, pretty please
This is what its over : Why do you think the dictators/military leaders found widespread support among the people of their nation? Support your answer with details from the lesson.

Answer 1

Oppression, prolonged cruel or unjust treatment or control, no one wants to face their especially when the person is sinister. Dictator Francisco Franco ruled Spain from 1939 until 1975. He gained power in the military during the Spanish Civil War thus he gained control of the National army. Franco reinforced several antagonistic group, and he received power that he was able to have until his death in 1975. During World War II, Spain remained neutral besides Hitler bringing the country into the war with the Axis. Such as, Hitler, no one wanted to him what he was doing was wrong, they were scared of getting tortured or getting there family killed in the process. A lot of people hoped if they followed what he said that they would get be released from his camps. I think sitting there and taking it from a person like that is far worse than speaking up and getting punished for it. Hitler claimed himself to be a good leader, who loved to be feared as well as loved. His way of thinking was so cruel and messed up blaming all the Jews. Benito Mussolini with Adolf Hitler in Munich, Germany in 1940. Mussolini would lead Italy into the war on the side of the Axis powers, a decision that proved to be catastrophic for Italy. In Italy Benito Mussolini, took over as the head of the Fascist, calling himself “Il Duce” (“Supreme Leader”). His policies and activities made most Italians into poverty. He went to war with Ethiopia, Greece, and France, and lost to all. Mussolini’s alliance with Hitler drew Italy into World War II, and the results were horrific for Italy. As a result, his body was hung upside down at a gas station. Poor Italy it took those years to pull itself out of the depths of poverty, Italy later rose from the ashes from his atrocious leadership. Joseph Stalin was even more dishonorable than Hitler, but he was asked to join by the West as a comrade in the battle against Hitler and Mussolini. Stalin was able to demonstrate his own brutal way to power. He created a series of five-year plans to increase food production and more. He didn’t like people wasting his time, the programs were harsh, and anyone who stood in his way were killed. About 20 million Russian died as a result of his brutality. Stalin enlisted with Hitler in 1939, but by 1941, Hitler moved against Russia. Hundreds of thousands of German soldiers froze to death in their oppressive summer uniforms as Russia’s unbearable cold weather during the war. The Russians themselves sustained loathsome casualties during the war. It is estimated that between 20 million and 30 million Russians died fighting the Germans. These four horrible tyrants have a few things in common, such as being feared, having their own type of slaves/followers, and having horrible deaths.

Answer 2

You have a few spelling errors, personalized the essay (which is generally a bad idea, you should not use "I" and similar words in an essay) and occasionally talk in circles, but you got the point across.

Do some editing. Other than that, nicely done.

Answer 3

everything is good it's just some gramer errors but so far its all good

Answer 4

Such as?

Answer 5

This is definitely a first draft. It's in need of rewriting.

Answer 6

Remove unneeded details, none of the "poor Italy/I think sitting there" stuff, that's a bad idea to write, and separate the sections. If one paragraph set focuses on one dictator, all information on that dictator should go there.

Answer 7

I've found that using the person your talking about's last name instead of a pronoun like he/she makes the paper flow a bit more smoothly. Also,you don't want to introduce your own ideas or beliefs in a history thesis, so you should take out the "I think that..." part.