Question

The Manifestation (Sci-fI/ Horror preview)

Answer 1

(Preview)
It stood to the side of Kendra caressing its fangs upon her ice kissed neck immediately the Weejigo tongue pierced her throat like a kebab; the blood gushed from the gaping hole and blurred my vision, in a haze of panic Diego rushed for the wall panel. His leg was caught under the bulkhead, lodging his spine between the door it jammed in his bone marrow I hid under my station as the Weejigo burst through the door without effort splitting his body open its icy breath perpetrated the room as it scanned for me its laser blue eyes tried to scope me out i could do nothing but remain in paralysis as I awaited certain death.

Answer 2

Ummm, well thats creative...

Answer 3

Wtf is a weeijo? Sounds like a retarted mexican drink

Answer 4

Also the part about the spine needs more detail

Answer 5

(Preview 2)
The frost violated my lungs as the chill contaminated my bones with paralysis, it stared me straight in the eyes and let out a breath so foul that defiled the air upon my face.
Creating a toxic bubble which ensnared my nose, the blood drizzled from its mouth like fresh rain droplets, as a string of flesh danced on its tongue. The taste for flesh excited it to the sensation of blood, my blood which it now had an insatiable appetite for. Its low growl bellowed from the razor wire for teeth in its mouth, only gave me notice that the hunt was on.

Answer 6

Interesting story you got there it looks amazing so far :) can't wait to see the rest of it. The story is very creative. I like how you added the author (you) into the context thats very interesting ^-^ keep me updated! :)