Question

Can someone Please look at my news report?
Is there any grammar or spelling mistake let me know or just correct that. (Thanks in advance)

Answer 1

Madness end in tragic death
Yesterday at 4:00 am, guards found the dead body of an innocent girl named Ophelia. After investigation, the guards found out that it is an accident. Although many people still believed that Ophelia did suicide because she could not control the trauma of her father's death.
The guards told that "Gertrude told us that someone is drowning in the stream". When asked from Gertrude (that how did she know that someone is drowning in the stream) she said that “I am enjoying a cool breeze on Elsinore castle floor. Then from there I saw that Ophelia was sitting near a tree by a stream and making circles of dead flowers for her hair. Suddenly she fell into the icy water of the stream. Then, I immediately informed the guards but unfortunately she died.
In the whole scenario, Laertes seemed very sad and angry. First of all his father died and then his sister. Hlet appeared very sad and emotional. He also justify love his love for Ophelia. Hamlet said that "I loved Ophelia very much. Forty thousands brothers could not love her as much as I did". Claudius called Ophelia death day “the worst day for Denmark ". The story of Ophelia ended in a sadness way.

Answer 2

@Lady.Liv1776 are you plz look at my news report

Answer 3

@LibaKhan

Answer 4

Um you did good, I remade your story changing it just a bit so you can see it. Then you can base it of the few tips I gave you.

Answer 5

Do you see how I changed it?

Answer 6

By making it a bit more descriptive?