Question

please help by reading my paper and telling me if anything needs to be fixed
paper is posted under this in a pdf

Answer 1

There are a few errors in the first paragraph that I'll start with.
I've corrected them in green:

“An eye for an eye will only make the whole world blind.” \(\color{lime}{-}\) Mahatma Gandhi
\(\bf\color{lime}{In}\) The Awareness by Gene Stone & Jon Doyle\(\color{lime}{,}\) you meet a couple animals that have been given human-level consciousness.

Answer 2

The second paragraph is good. (:

Answer 3

Now, for the third paragraph:

Now that he is aware\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) he is more happy to be able to talk to Jessie\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) his owner that he loves.
\(\bf\color{lime}{However, he}\) understands that\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) because he has had a better life as a dog that has a great owner\(\bf\color{lime}{,~it}\) doesn’t
mean that he can't remember the days before she saved him from the dreadful pet store.

Answer 4

Keeping up with me, so far? :p

Answer 5

yes I am thank you for doing this for me (:

Answer 6

No problem! ^.^

Also, for the quote you have in that third paragraph:

‘‘\(\bf\color{lime}{M}\)ost humans are kind.
You don’t kill everyone because a few are bad. Anyways, Jessie has been so good to us. Isn’t
that all that matters\(\bf\color{lime}{?}\)’’ (66)

Answer 7

Nancy the elephant has been mistreated ever since she has come in contact with humans\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) and feels that they all deserve what the revolution is bringing to \(\bf\color{lime}{their}\) front door. She remembers when she was \(\bf\color{lime}{young,}\) humans killed her dad just for his ivory tusks, and when she was captured and shipped to a strange new world. She was forced to learn tricks just to entertain the humans that mistreated her. She still wonders about her friend Edgar\(\bf\color{lime}{,~and}\) how he never followed the trainer\(\bf\color{lime}{'}\)s instructions\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) and that one day she awoke to find out that Edgar was gone. She thought that the humans deserved everything that had happen\(\bf\color{lime}{ed}\) to them during the animals\(\bf\color{lime}{'}\) revolution. At one point\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) Nancy captures a family of humans that she then trains like they did with her, she forces them to perform for her and the group of animals \(\bf\color{lime}{then}\) discovers that she is being no better \(\bf\color{lime}{than}\) they were to her. ‘‘Nancy could kill her in flash. She didn’t. \(\bf\color{lime}{S}\)he pulled her ear back. She lowered her trunk. She wanted to cry, but instead she said, ‘‘\(\bf\color{lime}{G}\)o back to your mother and father\(\bf\color{lime}{.}\)’’ (179). Nancy discovered that just because a couple of humans were bad\(\bf\color{lime}{,~it}\) didn’t mean that she had to kill every human she came across.

Answer 8

Sorry I'm a bit slow. cx

Answer 9

no worries your not slow haha you are awesome (:

Answer 10

And for the last one:

All \(\bf\color{lime}{of}\) the characters have inner conflict that makes them question \(\bf\color{lime}{their}\) decisions. Cooper the dog doesn’t know if he should go and join the other animals in the revolution\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) or stay with Jessie\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) who has taken really good care of him. Bear understands that there is war going on between the animals and humans\(\bf\color{lime}{,}\) but feels the need to figure out more about the humans before joining the revolution. Nancy the elephant discovers that the hate she has for the humans that have mistreated her for years doesn’t mean that she has to hate all humans. The inner conflicts that all \(\bf\color{lime}{of}\) the characters go through help them grow and discover more about themselves as they progress through the book.

Answer 11

If you have any questions as to why, feel free to ask, I'm happy to help. ^.^

Answer 12

okay (: thank you very very much you are a total life saver!

Answer 13

You're very welcome!
If you ever need more help, just let me know! ^.^

Answer 14

Also, don't forget to close the question. :p