i am doing a personal narrative essay about bullying and being pressured to change so that you can 'fit in'. is "Bullying occurs everywhere, even in the least expected areas" a good hook? or should i change it to something like "Have you ever seen those happy family pictures?" (my essay is about being bullied by my cousins, btw)

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cresciez · Answer

I like the idea that bullying occurs everywhere, because it's true. You have very good ideas! :)

anonymous · Answer

thank you! :) @Cresciez

anonymous · Answer

so, it would work? @Cresciez

cresciez · Answer

Definitely!

anonymous · Answer

alrighty, thanks so much!! @Cresciez

cresciez · Answer

You're very welcome @brittneygarcia :D