i am writing a personal narrative essay and i am wondering would this sentence make sense?
"Upon seeing me, they smiled my way as sweetly as a lemon."

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i am writing a personal narrative essay and i am wondering would this sentence make sense?
"Upon seeing me, they smiled my way as sweetly as a lemon."

anonymous · Answer

the simile is supposed to express how their smile wasn't friendly

anonymous · Answer

I don't know, I didn't get the connection. Maybe you could do, like, sour? Because the sweetly and lemon makes it hard to connect it being unfriendly.

anonymous · Answer

ok, i see what you're saying. thank you, i was having trouble with this sentence :)

anonymous · Answer

No problem :)