Question

Hate to be this person... ;-;
Rip, but can anyone help me with revision on le essay? only le 500 words ;-; Everyone in the English section are useeellesssss

Answer 1

not commenting directly on it cuz I'm logged in and would rather not have my name printed all over your doc :P

but changed some things
(should probably not allow actual changes by strangers)
(there should be an option to allow just suggestions)
anyways,
high-lighted some things in third paragraph
http://english.stackexchange.com/questions/123738/use-you-or-one-in-formal-writing

Answer 2

I have my main document saved, and open in word dco ^_^
I really appreciate you taking a look. :) Do you think the economic terms were simple enough to understand and stood out enough? @sleepyhead314

Answer 3

yes yes all the terms are understandable :)

highlighted in green something you should consider rephrasing

Answer 4

*uncomfortable with it not being times new roman*

Answer 5

Tell me about it, i just havent changed it yet XD

Answer 6

Thank you so much :)

Answer 7

nanana
just procrastinating on my own essay

Answer 8

try fixing the stuff I put in green
I had to read it about five times over to understand that you want 'laptops are advertised more than desktops are' but the comma phrasing got overboard

Answer 9

i gotchu, will rephrase, thank you :)

Answer 10

I should probably get back to writing my own essay ;-;
buh bye