Question

Can someone please look at my diary prompts??

Answer 1

Diary in Role: (Writing)
Elsinore Castle, Denmark
November 07, 2015.

When I see the ghost first time then I initially assumes that the ghost appearance must mean that there is something wrong with the current government, “this bodes some strange eruption to our state", and that the appearance is foreshadowing some ominous event that will soon occur. I get more shock when I see the ghost exactly looking like the old king then I try to talk with the ghost but it’s disappear. Little later, the ghost of Old Hamlet appears once more. This time I again try to speak to the ghost. But when the ghost remains silent, I tells Marcellus and Bernardo to try to detain it; they strike at the ghost with their spears but jab only air. A rooster crows just as the ghost appears ready to reply to reply me at last. This sound startles the ghost away. But then I decide to tell Prince Hamlet, Old Hamlet’s son, about the apparition, and the others agree.
Horatio, Hamlet's closest friend
Elsinore Castle, Denmark
November 07, 2015.

I get disturbed when I hear that my mother, Gertrude has remarried with my uncle Claudius soon after the death of my father. I totally furious by the idea and cannot come to terms with it. After some days later, Horatio came to me but at first, I was too aggrieved to recognize Horatio, my old school friend, but finally then I welcome Horatio warmly. After chatting about the state, Horatio tells me that he has seen my dead father recently – the night before. Then I ask him to explain more, and Horatio tells the story of the appearance of the ghost. After all, first I can’t believe that but then I decide to attend the watch that very night in hopes of seeing the ghost myself.
Hamlet, the Prince of Denmark



Elsinore Castle, Denmark
November 07, 2015.

I have very great feelings about Hamlet but my father Polonius and brother Laertes don’t want me to meet with Hamlet because they believe that prince Hamlet is just playing with and he actually don’t like me. My father and brother they both want me to stay far from hamlet so that he can’t reach at me and also they want me tell if Hamlet says anything to me. Then I told my father, Polonius, that I fears Hamlet is "mad" in my love and I also tell him that how a distressed Hamlet came into my room, grabbing my wrist, backed away and just looked into my face, studying it before he slowly backed out of the room without looking back at the door.
Ophelia, noblewoman of Denmark


Elsinore Castle, Denmark
November 07, 2015.
In the darkness, the ghost speaking to me, claiming to be my father’s spirit, and want me to take revenge from the father murder. Also, tell me that Claudius has corrupted Denmark and corrupted Gertrude, having taken her from the pure love of her first marriage and seduced her in the foul lust of their incestuous union. The ghost also urges me not to act against mother in any way, telling me to “leave her to heaven” and to the pangs of her own conscience (I.v.86). As dawn breaks, the ghost disappears. Horatio and Marcellus arrive upon the scene and frantically ask me what has happened. But then I refuse to tell them, after this all and decided to obey the ghost.
Hamlet, the Prince of Denmark

Answer 2

Is there any grammar or spelling mistake please let me know?

Answer 3

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Answer 4

@iMariella

Answer 5

@RCCB

Answer 6

hi i can help

Answer 7

ok sure

Answer 8

No grammar mistakes! :)

Answer 9

I think there's a few words that need a bit of corrections. :)

Answer 10

are you there??

Answer 11

@iMariella is right.

Answer 12

There are* oops.

Answer 13

I'll re-write the first prompt. It won't be perfect, but I'll try my best! Another person can correct my work :)

Answer 14

ok

Answer 15

When I saw the ghost for the first time, I assumed that the ghost's appearance must mean that there was something wrong with the current government, “this bodes some strange eruption to our state", (< I don't really know what that is so I'll just leave that alone) and that the appearance was foreshadowing some ominous event that would soon occur. What I noticed about this presence was that it looked exactly like the old king, which shocked me. The spirit that stood before me was the ghost of Old Hamlet. I tried speaking to the ghost, but before I knew it, it vanished. Not long after, he reappeared. I finally said something to him, but he just stood there silent. I told Marcellus and Bernardo to attempt to detain it, and immediately the two strike. They sliced and jabbed through the air, which did no harm to him. The spirit finally opens his mouth to give a reply, but was then cut off by the crow of a rooster, which startled him and he disappeared once again. After the encounter of the spirit of Old Hamlet, I decided to go and tell Old Hamlet's son, Prince Hamlet about the experience. (< Someone can fix that.. I just threw that in.)
Hamlet's closest friend

There you go! Someone can go over my work and fix what I did wrong. I know it's not perfect.. It would've been easier if I have read the book xD That's all I can do for now. Good night! :) xx

Answer 16

I'm not very good at writing. Sorry. xD

Answer 17

@iMariella you at least try thou better then other people and thnx a lot

Answer 18

You're very welcome! Glad that I could help :))

Answer 19

it looks good to me. (i haven't read the book)

Answer 20

ok hope so

Answer 21

what was the prompt?

Answer 22

@MTALHAHASSAN2

Answer 23

what you mean

Answer 24

what was the prompt for the essays?

Answer 25

Is diary prompts is not a same thing??

Answer 26

I became disturbed when I heard that my mother, Gertrude, remarried my uncle, Claudius, soon after the death of my father. I’m extremely furious about the marriage, and cannot come to terms with it. A couple days later, Horatio came to me. At first, I was too aggrieved to recognize Horatio, my old school friend, but finally I welcome Horatio warmly. After chatting about the state (< what do you mean by state?), Horatio tells me that he has seen my dead father recently – the night before. I ask him to explain more, and Horatio tells the story of the appearance of the ghost. At first, I can’t believe his story, but then I decide to watch for the ghost that very night, in hopes of seeing the ghost. Hamlet, the Prince of Denmark

this is for 2

Answer 27

I have very extreme feelings about Hamlet, but my father, Polonius, and brother, Laertes, don’t want me to meet with Hamlet. They believe that prince Hamlet is just playing with me and he actually don’t like me. My father and brother both want me to stay far from Hamlet so that he can’t reach at me (< what do you mean by reach at me?). They also want me tell if Hamlet says anything to me. I Then told my father, Polonius, that I fear Hamlet is "mad" in love and I also tell him a distressed Hamlet came into my room, grabbed my wrist, then looked into my face, studying it before he slowly backed out of the room without looking back.

this is for 3 @MTALHAHASSAN2

Answer 28

My father and brother both want me to stay far from Hamlet so that he can’t come close to me.

Answer 29

Would: My father and brother both want me to stay far from Hamlet so that he can’t fall in love with me. work?

Answer 30

yes

Answer 31

And what about my question about 2?

Answer 32

I am not sure about that one so I am just goona delete that

Answer 33

The ghost is speaking to me in the darkness of the night. It’s claiming to be my father’s spirit, and the ghost wants me to take revenge on the murderer of my father. Also, the ghost told me that Claudius has corrupted Denmark and Gertrude, having taken her from the pure love of her first marriage and seduced her in the foul lust of their incestuous (< what does that mean?) union. The ghost also urges me not to act against my mother in any way, telling me to “leave her to heaven” and to the pangs of her own conscience (I.v.86) (< why is this here?). As dawn breaks, the ghost disappears. Horatio and Marcellus arrive upon the scene and frantically ask me what has happened. But I refuse to tell them, and decide to obey the ghost.

this is for 4 @MTALHAHASSAN2

Answer 34

i will put the final drafts together.

Answer 35

you mean why is it there (I.v.86)??

Answer 36

yes, is that part of your prompt or something?

Answer 37

Also, the ghost told me that Claudius has corrupted Denmark and Gertrude, having taken her from the pure love of her first marriage and seduced her in the foul lust of their incestuous (< what does that mean?) In this all, the ghost trying to saying is that the Claudius is one who murdered your father and also marry with your mother. But know you have to take revenge from him

Answer 38

like that stuff

Answer 39

so why is the (I.v.86) there?

Answer 40

lol ok delete that

Answer 41

we don't need it

Answer 42

what about the dates

Answer 43

which date do i have to write

Answer 44

Does the book say when these events take place, like the year or month?

Answer 45

idk because i don't have book I just read it online

Answer 46

what website?

Answer 47

I use so many website to such as like sparknotes etc.

Answer 48

i came up with random dates @MTALHAHASSAN2

Answer 49

Final Draft (i deleted it lol)

Elsinore Castle, Denmark
June 04, 1600
When I saw the ghost for the first time, I assumed that the ghost's appearance must mean that there was something wrong with the current government, “this bodes some strange eruption to our state", and that the appearance was foreshadowing some ominous event that would soon occur. What I noticed about this presence was that it looked exactly like the old king, which shocked me. The spirit that stood before me was the ghost of Old Hamlet. I tried speaking to the ghost, but before I knew it, it vanished. Not long after, he reappeared. I finally said something to him, but he just stood there silent. I told Marcellus and Bernardo to attempt to detain it, and immediately the two strike. They sliced and jabbed through the air, which did no harm to him. The spirit finally opens his mouth to give a reply, but was then cut off by the crow of a rooster, which startled him and he disappeared once again. After the encounter of the spirit of Old Hamlet, I decided to go and tell Old Hamlet's son, Prince Hamlet about the experience.
Horatio, Hamlet's closest friend

Elsinore Castle, Denmark
June 04, 1600.
I became disturbed when I heard that my mother, Gertrude, my uncle, Claudius, soon after the death of my father. I’m extremely furious about the marriage, and cannot come to terms with it. A couple days later, Horatio came to me. At first, I was too aggrieved to recognize Horatio, my old school friend, but finally I welcome Horatio warmly. After chatting, Horatio tells me that he has seen my dead father recently – the night before. I ask him to explain more, and Horatio tells the story of the appearance of the ghost. At first, I can’t believe his story, but then I decide to watch for the ghost that very night, in hopes of seeing the ghost.
Hamlet, the Prince of Denmark

Elsinore Castle, Denmark
June 05, 1600.
The ghost is speaking to me in the darkness of the night. It’s claiming to be my father’s spirit, and the ghost wants me to take revenge on the murderer of my father. Also, the ghost told me that Claudius has corrupted Denmark and Gertrude, having taken her from the pure love of her first marriage and seduced her in the foul lust of their incestuous union. The ghost also urges me not to act against my mother in any way, telling me to “leave her to heaven” and to the pangs of her own conscience. As dawn breaks, the ghost disappears. Horatio and Marcellus arrive upon the scene and frantically ask me what has happened. But I refuse to tell them, and decide to obey the ghost.
Hamlet, the Prince of Denmark

Elsinore Castle, Denmark
June 06, 1600.
I have very extreme feelings about Hamlet, but my father, Polonius, and brother, Laertes, don’t want me to meet with Hamlet. They believe that prince Hamlet is just playing with me and he actually don’t like me. My father and brother both want me to stay far from Hamlet so that he can’t fall in love with me. They also want me tell if Hamlet says anything to me. I Then told my father, Polonius, that I fear Hamlet is "mad" in love and I also tell him a distressed Hamlet came into my room, grabbed my wrist, then looked into my face, studying it before he slowly backed out of the room without looking back.
Ophelia, noblewoman of Denmark

Answer 50

does that ^ work @MTALHAHASSAN2 ?

Answer 51

are you alive? :0

Answer 52

yes I am and thnx a lot

Answer 53

@Monkey4224 you are an awesome person

Answer 54

your welcome and thank you. :)

Answer 55

i don't have any word to appreciated your effort

Answer 56

You are amazing@@#

Answer 57

you are amazing too.

Answer 58

thnx

Answer 59

your welcome.

Answer 60

by the way where you get the dates

Answer 61

i searched for when hamlet came out, then came up with the rest.

Answer 62

ok lol great work

Answer 63

thanks

Answer 64

you welcome

Answer 65

when you get the score back i would like to know what you got. :)

Answer 66

ok