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OpenStudy (anonymous):

He felt as if he was flying down towards the ground, many emotions, scared, happy, angry. Every one was watching him, it seemed to take forever. He face came closer to the ground slowly, Everyone was staring in shock some even laughing. Then suddenly, he hit the ground and was still alive, Everyone was laughing. He turned around and saw a cardboard box, which he had tripped over. How's this... thing i wrote

OpenStudy (anonymous):

"He turned around and saw a cardboard box, which he had tripped over." I think that could be improved.. It sounds a tad weird. That's the only thing, the rest is good! :D

OpenStudy (anonymous):

lol thanks. I was just bored, so i just wrote tripping very exaggerated

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