MEDAL + FAN
PLZ CHECK MY WORK

Leah grabbed her pure and got on the bus, simultaneously she pulled out her phone to text her friend. Unexpectedly someone on the bus asked about her phone wondering what model it was. Meanwhile the bus arrived at the mall, and Leah got out. All of the sudden, she had realized she had forgotten her purse!

Question

MEDAL + FAN
PLZ CHECK MY WORK


Leah grabbed her pure and got on the bus, simultaneously she pulled out her phone to text her friend. Unexpectedly someone on the bus asked about her phone wondering what model it was. Meanwhile the bus arrived at the mall, and Leah got out. All of the sudden, she had realized she had forgotten her purse!

anonymous · Answer

What do we need to check?

anonymous · Answer

That my grammar is correct etc @TheInspector

mathmale · Answer

Your first sentence needs to be clarified by adding appropriate punctuation.

anonymous · Answer

Okay, I think I should change it by putting a period instead of a comma correct? @mathmale

anonymous · Answer

You misspelled "purse"

anonymous · Answer

Yes, fixed that

anonymous · Answer

Yea, change the comma into a period. And you would have to use a comma after the word "simultaneously"