can someone help me make this a better sentence : This shows how Louie utilizes his intelligence by thinking outside the box and not losing the potential to survive. For survival you have to maintain the focus and most of all think further.

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michaelac959 · Answer

this is English, but I can still help

wintersuntime · Answer

oh okay thanks sorry about that

michaelac959 · Answer

it looks good is this a question on a test or a sentence on an essay you want to make better?

wintersuntime · Answer

a sentence on an essay

wintersuntime · Answer

the teacher told me to make it better

michaelac959 · Answer

ok

michaelac959 · Answer

This shows how Louie utilizes his intelligence by thinking outside the box and not losing the potential to survive. For survival you have to maintain the focus and most of all think further.  (this is yours)
This shows how Louie (takes advantage of) his intelligence by thinking outside the box, and not losing the desire to survive. For survival(,) you have to maintain the focus and most of all think further ( mine) I put my changes in ()

wintersuntime · Answer

okay thank you so much

michaelac959 · Answer

your welcome tell me if its better

wintersuntime · Answer

yes it helped a lot thanks (:

michaelac959 · Answer

ok