Question

Hey Guys, Please share your views on my essay.
Question and essay are mentioned below.
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Answer 1

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Answer 2

Young adults just after high school or as soon as they hit the age eighteen, want to move out from their parents’ house and live freely. I think they should stay with their families for a longer time before they have to move out because of job or career or relationships.
Young adults want to enjoy their life and living independently seem attractive but managing the living expenses is not easy. They would need to work part-time or full time to make a living and this would leave hardly have any time for college studies or pursuing their interests in fields such as sports or music. Young adults who are staying with their families wouldn't have to worry about the living expenses and they can spend good amount of time on studies or focusing on their interests.
Young adults who are living independently do not have any leash and they spend time in frivolities such as booze, partying, and one night stands. While done in a controlled way these may be benign but if done in an uncontrolled manner they can have serious implications such as unwanted pregnancies, road accidents in case of drunk driving. Young adults living with their parents have a leash and they are required to have an appropriate behavior and follow certain rules and regulations. They may regard these rules and regulations as un-necessary but these will have long term benefits for them.
Young adults who are residing with their parents and families get a chance to develop and enrich the relationships with their parents. At this age young adults have the mindset to understand their parents better. They can support their parents emotionally and help them in their free time with household activities such as dish washing, cleaning, sweeping and so on.
I would like to reiterate my opinion that young adults should live longer with their families in their early phase of life.

Answer 3

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Answer 4

I like it

Answer 5

thanks guys, any improvements I can make?

Answer 6

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Answer 7

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Answer 8

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Answer 9

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