Question

i need help please in english 2
Word Choice
3. Paste one paragraph that you feel could use more interesting word choice below. Revise it with more vivid wording. Pay particular attention to places where you might switch to more active verbs, use precise language, include strong details, employ figurative language, or add dialogue.
Organization
4. Outline your story in the following way:
First…
Then…
And then…
Finally…

Answer 1

5. Identify places in your story organization where the series of events could be clearer.
Transitions
6. Paste the transitions you have used to move between ideas in your story.
7. Identify any places in your story where you are not using clear transitions. Write new transitions for those parts and paste them here.
Grammar, Structure, Punctuation, Spelling
8. Identify any errors in your writing mechanics and correct them here.

Answer 2

my story
Proserpina is frightened. Because she didn’t do what her mother said to her and then she went exploring in the forest. When Proserpina caught sight of the plant she have never seen. She rip the plant and then she was take it to her mother. But she didn’t know that once she ripped the plant from the ground she would be opening a big hole that would lead to Pluto castle. The king was trying to luring her to him but when he saw that she did not collaborate with the king so he kidnapped her. She never thought this type of thing would happen to her. On the way to his castle Pluto told her that you are going to be fine and then he offered her a glass of water from the magical stream. She refused but she knew that Pluto would still try to trick her into drinking the water. So she promised to him that she would eat or drink one bit of anything while she was in Pluto’s custody. After 50 minutes Proserpina saw the big castle for the first time. The castle was the color of element also a gothic type of structure with a big vulture at each corner of the roof. The door had big brass knockers in shape of panda face. If I look past the vultures on the roof I can see the castle has several tower. Also on the sides of the castle there are small little windows will a lot of bars on them that connected all the wat to the grass on the ground. This place had felt of tension and fright. You can tell a lot of people to make the castle seem a lot attractive will a big playground on the side of the palace. No one ever seen playing on it. It was the type of the place that made you scaring of your own shadow. When Pluto jump on his horse and when he sent the cook to make of treats that contained some water from the magical stream in it. After everyone is done Pluto escorted Proserpina to her room and then he told her to do what would please her. The girl spend 2 days locked in her own room crying a lot. And the third day of being on the castled she was going to explored the castle. When Pluto saw her wandering around. He gave her permission to explore the castle as long as she does not go in to the west. Obviously Proserpina didn’t care what he said so she goes into the west and find herself inside the dungeon. After 2 minutes she wanted to know why the prisoners were in the dungeon. She was talking to them for hours then she learned that they were there for very foolish reason. When she leaves she talk to one prisoners. Proserpina ask the prisoner why he has been sent to the dungeon “Because I did not wish to follow Pluto’s orders.” She spend 2 hours talking to the prisoner and then he promise her that if she free all the prisoners, he would lead her back to her home. Proserpina told the prisoner she has a plan to free you guys and bring the king down. Before going with her plan. She told the prisoners the game plan of her idea. Meanwhile Pluto was outside of the dungeon door listening her plan, so he threw Proserpina with the prisoner. So Proserpina finds simple objects like nails to pick the locks and free the prisoners and then they decide to carry out their previous plan. After the fight, Pluto is thrown into own dungeon to rot. The prisoners wanted Proserpina to lead the castle but she refused and left with the man that promise to take her to her home. She finally arrives at home she and her mother reunite. The stranger that took her home has nowhere else to go so the girl invites him to stay in her home. After a while Proserpine’s mother falls in love the stranger and they lived happily ever after

Answer 3

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Answer 4

@amistre64

Answer 5

Hm...

Answer 6

It's not a etst is it?

Answer 7

nope