Question

All my life Fortunado has lived across from me, and all my life he has been of more wealth than I. He and I were both born in the same week. So of course it was only in his conceded nature that he would have a bigger and grander birthday celebration than I each year. As an adolescent I hated the way he acted about his wealth but I never said anything about it. When we attended primary school he always wooed people with his money, he would pay off our teachers for grades or bring in high-end toys to our classmates to ensure his popularity. I could have done the same but in my up bringing I was

Answer 1

thats the intro paragraph i need input to continue into a body paragraph

Answer 2

@lostintime

Answer 3

its like the prequel to the cask of amontillado i needd to write a short story leading up to edgar allen poes short story

Answer 4

I did something like this but instead of prequel I choose to do like a sequel type thing.

Answer 5

oh yea that was an option but i dont think i could pull it off so chose the before story

Answer 6

Yeah I did the same assignment as you, are you in English 3?

Answer 7

yes i am

Answer 8

Me too, is it okay if I ask what school you are attending? Okay so ooooh I like where you are going with this. I think you really did an outstanding job with the introduction. The only thing I don't understand is "I could have done the same but in my up bringing I was" I feel like you didn't finish that sentence. Otherwise everything seems so good so far, good luck! :]

Answer 9

maybe i over looked that sentence cuz it wasnt supposed to end that way lol and thanks and im attending flvs online

Answer 10

Me too! are you full-time? If so the semester is supposed to end this Friday so I wish you luck! Just so you know you can talk to your teachers if you can't finish by Friday and they might extend your time. :]

Answer 11

sorta i think im under "part time" because i missed the deadline for full time enrollment

Answer 12

okay so that was my intro but could u gice me some pointer on how i should set up or start my body paragraph?

Answer 13

Ohh okay then you might have more time than us full-times. SO since you are in part-time it must be hard doing both public and online at the same time omfg.
Yeah sure give me a second :]

Answer 14

actually its kinda like an exception since i missed the full time enrollment period they just put me under "part time but i am homeschool and do 6 classes online well 5 now becuase i already finished one of my courses
my teachers encourage me to finish by certain dates but i work on my own scheduale an turn in a minimum of assignments per class each week

Answer 15

Oh so you are homeschooled and virtual at the same time?
You have until Jan. 20 to enlist in the full-time btw :]

Answer 16

no just virtual but i guess by doing flvs at home its recognized as homeschooled

Answer 17

cool ill look into that thanks

Answer 18

I'm sorry I'm kinda confused because part-time is for when you go to a school and you want to work ahead so you do both public and online.
Full-time is when you are completely online.
I did my research on the part-time and spoke to the principal about which is better and how they work and she said the part-time you have to go to a school but you can still work on flvs.

Btw I am almost done writing the pointers for you.

Answer 19

yea i know its confusing but when i registered they kinda made an exception and let me enroll as "part-time" but have the 6 classes like a full time and i work at my own pace but ofcourse i have to turn in the required amount of assignments per week

Answer 20

Wow, I wish the school could be so nice to me :/ I've had the worst experience with the people working.
Part-times are allowed to do up to 6 classes either way so that's probably why they did it.

Okay pointers:
Start at the very beginning.
Do the whole "show don't tell" be very descriptive rather than talking too much and making it boring.
A way to do this is using dialogue which is a key factor in narrative essays.
Remember to use good transition words and methods.
Remember to narrate rather than just writing random things.
On each paragraph focus on only 1 sequence of event.

Answer 21

could u give me an example of narrative i dont think i understand it completely and thats the point of the assignment
and im sorry bout ur expeirience with the staff as lame as it sounds my parents did all the atlaking so im not sure what i am labled as i just do my work cuz i just wanna get thru it with good grades so i can have an easy time my senior year

Answer 22

I'm going to be honest from what you said I think your are in full-time, you should ask your parents because that is very important to know for when you take eocs (end of course) exams and such because for those you don't take them online, you have to go to a designated school and take it there.

Well a narrative is just you telling a story.

Answer 23

so me saying what the character does? or me as the character narrating??
hold on let me check something and ill tell u if im part or full

Answer 24

are u in focus or connexus ?

Answer 25

im in "vsa"..?

Answer 26

Connexus is now being used for K-8 full-time only I think
Focus is full-time 9-12
VSA is part-time only so I am confused as to why you are not attending an actual physical school since that is how part-time works.

You are telling the story so in other words you are the character telling the story.

Answer 27

lol i dont know either they just let me do it this way u sem to be well educated on the matter but all i know is they let me do my school this way and thank you for all u help really i aprreciate it enormously

Answer 28

Good luck on it! Its pretty easy work if you think about it and trust me you seem to be doing so good so far!