Question

I am writing a wattpad book and I want to know what your think about the first chapter! (Also, I make covers if you need one)

Answer 1

Note: This chapter is VERY cheesy and cliché.

It was around 1:00 A.M., on April 23rd. I Lifted my right foot up on to the small, gray, night stand to tie my black Converse. I then grabbed my black backpack with all of the things I would need for my trip. As I climbed out my window, I scratched my left arm leaving about a two inch bloodstain on my white T-shirt. Dang. I have already ran into a problem and I haven't even left the house yet. I threw on my black leather jacket to cover up the stain.

Finally, I was off. Driving down the empty streets of Orlando. Once I got close to the Disney World entrance, I parked my Shiny silver Chevy on the side of the road. I walked the rest of the few miles. It didn't take very long- Okay fine it took around 2 hrs. By the time I snuck past the gates of Magic Kingdom it was 2:34am. The park opened at 8:00 A.M. That means that I have about 5 1/2 hours to explore and do whatever the heck I want to! I silently made my way down Main Street. I have taken this route many times, but never at 3 in the morning and definitely not all by myself. It was really strange being there with no screaming kids running around, But at the same time It was pretty cool.

Around 3 I started to get hot with the humid weather. I grabbed a pink hair tie from out of the front pocket of my backpack. I gathered my oily, straight, blondish-red hair and threw it up into a messy bun. I then went into the bathroom to change from my bloodstained white T-shirt into a black shirt so that i could take of my jacket. I was planning to stay until closing time that night, so I had packed extra clothes. When I finished in the bathroom, I finished walking down main street until I reached Cinderella's Castle. I stood looking at it for a few minutes. As I started walking around the right side of it, there was a radio voice coming from behind me. I couldn't make out what it was saying because directly after, I heard a Deep voice say "10-4". I knew this was security. I ran the rest of the way around the castle until I found the next road and then kept on running. Somehow I found myself to be in Tomorrow-land. I ran into the bathroom across from the people mover to catch my breath. On my way to fantasy land, I heard a new voice coming from the opposite direction.

Answer 2

It's okay but it is only the first chapter It'll probably get better.

Answer 3

I like it so far! It's definitely the kind of adventure I would love to go on. Looking forward to the rest! Also, if you already have the wattpad, I can follow you on there.

Answer 4

My wattpad is ellamccartney231 whats yours?

Answer 5

WHich cover do you like better? I made them myself.

Answer 6

@DanHowell

Answer 7

My favorite would have to be the first one. My username is mootdiggs and I'll follow you now.

Answer 8

ok!

Answer 9

This chapter is great, it definitely makes me want to read more! Good job :)

Answer 10

This chapter is great, but I think you can tone it down a little bit on the description. Some of the information is kind of unnecessary. Also I really like the first book cover that u made

Answer 11

Thank you for the feedback!