Question

Hi I hope you some of my new song I want you to check it Thanks!

Answer 1

One Moon Night under the stares one moon night ago I was dancing in the dark heard the music miles away and there saying.... You could this no matter what, you could do this no matter what, you become a dancer, hip hop, or ballerina, ooh you can do this..as it started turning down I danced away in the dark he came up to me grabbed my hand gently and said may I have this dance?? will you dance with me? I said yes, yes I will he twirled and looked into my eye's and..... said.......... Your eye's they twinkle with the stare's no one could miss those pretty pretty eye's

Answer 2

This kinda sounds like a poem :0

Answer 3

It does sounds like a poem.

Answer 4

wow well I wanted it to be a song/peom :D

Answer 5

i LOVE it

Answer 6

thanks

Answer 7

@sws_pvt @skatergirl147 @-SpencerBraz- @adamgrimm

Answer 8

nice

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thanks

Answer 10

I love it!

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thx

Answer 12

hey, i love it

Answer 13

thx

Answer 14

i can see you being a singer in your future.

Answer 15

Awwwwwwww thank you *holds heart*

Answer 16

you are welcome

Answer 17

austine do you know any lyrics

Answer 18

This is potentially the worst grammar and lyrical structure I have ever witnessed. Aside from any sort of musical critiques, the grammatical errors are dripping throughout this piece. Ideas are incomplete, punctuation is near absent, and the overall structure is abhorrent. I don't even know where to start so I'm just going to say, rewrite it. and properly this time. Sorry if I offended you or anybody fro that matter, but after all it is just my opinion.

Answer 19

DUDE your Jealous

Answer 20

@elite False.

Answer 21

that was mean @tanner23456

Answer 22

I know

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.....

Answer 24

@hauntedwoodsgal whether or not you take offense is up to you. The nature of my statement, however, was not intended to be offensive in any form. It was my opinion and critique based on my training. Honest criticism is very beneficial if pertinent. Something, frankly, that this website lacks.

Answer 25

........................................................................ :(

Answer 26

I'm not saying you should stop writing music or that you're horrible or anything like that. So, if that's what you inferred, you need to be careful not to let your emotions get the better of you. Keep trying. Don't quit. It takes a lot of time an effort to write songs with a lot of set backs along the way, but you can't ever let anyone or anything discourage you.

Answer 27

thanks @tanner23456