Question

I already posted my story im writing in the reading subject, but i wanted to post it in the writing too. Please tell me what you think. The story is in the comments Thank you!!!!

Answer 1

Life of lies

It all started in a small town called Georgetown. In that town lived a girl named Liana Garcia. A teenager with bright red hair and eyes dark as night. She was always alone no matter where she went, always getting picked on. She grew up never understanding the meaning of life. She started giving up on everything, knowing no one would understand how she felt inside. The only thing she didn’t understand is, what happened to her when she was just a little girl? At the age of ten she asked her mother why she keeps telling the doctor that they got her when she was three years old. Her mother looked her straight in the eyes one day and asked if she really wanted to know. Liana answered with a nod and her mom told her that her Uncle and Aunt, Leo and Claire were her real parents. On that day she also found out that the people who raised her were her uncle and aunt. Ever since she was taken away from her real parents they have been her guardians. Leo and Claire were drug addicts and alcoholics, because of that they were in a car accident. Did they not know that if they weren’t drunk or high on crack then their little girl wouldn’t have had a fractured skull? Her father was taken to a hospital in a helicopter while her mother took off with the child instead of heading towards the hospital.
Ever since liana found out about her real parents she’s been trying to find out more information about the lies her whole family told her.

One day she thought she was better off dead, knowing nobody would even care, until she met him. A boy named James Leonor, an honor student whose life is as perfect as hers. When their eyes met she knew she felt a spark. That day when she was going to give her life away god sent her an angel from the heavens above. The following day he noticed her crying and asked what the matter was. When she told him that her grandfather had passed that day, he felt sorry and didn’t know what to do. So on the day of the funeral he surprised her when he showed up. That’s when she felt the spark again and knew that he was something worth staying alive for. A couple months later she and James got closer than ever, always counting on each other. He gave her a meaning for life. Whenever she was letting go of hope he was there to bring it back. He told her that he once lived here in Georgetown before he moved to Los Angeles. So she listened to his story and when he told her that he met a girl like her, little did she know that in the past they actually met? Two years went passed until the day he didn’t go to school because of a dentist appointment. He always made sure they kept in touch whenever they weren’t together. By then they were a couple, she never thought a guy like him would be in love with a girl like her. The day James wasn’t there she felt all lonely even though she made friends it didn’t feel the same without James. Later on that day she received horrible news that made her feel like how she felt before she met James. James brother Zak told her that when they went to the dentist they have given James medicine to fall asleep so they can do their job. An when Zak left the dentist with James in the passenger seat they were hit by a semi. Then Liana knew that something happened to the love of her life. She didn’t even bother letting Zak finish, because she already knew that James didn’t survive the crash. Even though with the tragic loss of her boyfriend she made a promise to never leave this world.

So day by day she tried moving on and eventually she did. Kids at school continued to make fun of her and she no longer cared. So what she did was become something different. She started getting in trouble with everybody, she just gave up. She dated other guys, but never felt the same way she did when she was with James. An she hated that she couldn’t get him off her mind. Later on she discovered that she had a little sister named May. Yet when she tried asking if it was true, all that her family members did was just say it wasn’t true. She knew three people who would tell her anything she wanted to know and like always they did. Now she knows that she’s not able to know any of this information until she’s eighteen. Ever since the tragic she has been changing her emotions. It wasn’t until last year when she started to feel a whole different person.She met this one guy who changed her, who showed her a whole different meaning to life. He’s the smart type of guy and she wanted to know more about him. So they started talking and eventually tried going out, but it never really worked out. They would have problems like ex-girlfriends and spending more time together. So in the end they broke up, but she didn’t know what was wrong with her. For some reason she couldn’t get him out of her head. She just didn’t understand what was going on. She thought if she tried forgetting him then she wouldn’t be as confused. Yet, it didn’t really happen, they started talking more and more. For some reason they kept going out, then again it still didn’t work out. It wasn’t until summer when they gave it one last shot, so far it hasn’t been so bad. Noticing that the feelings inside and the confusion she’s been feeling is because, she’s in love with him. Then it happens, she gets a flashback and starts to bring herself down. She starts to worry, doesn’t even know if he actually feels the same about her.


By the school has already started and now that she’s a sophomore. She only has two more years of school then she’ll end up graduating. So yet again she and her boyfriend have been on and off, but the only thing she doesn’t worry about is pain. She might feel hurt, but it's only puppy love and it's only high school. She knows she wants to spend the rest of her life with him. No matter what it takes she’ll do anything to stay with him. All girls need a happy ending and she wants him to have one too. She no longer has to worry about things that run through her mind. Nowadays the kids no longer pick on her and she grew up knowing how to take care of herself. She no longer have friends now she has sisters and brothers that she didn’t grew up with. She has forgotten about the past and moved on. She knows that in the future hell might break loose about the truth of her childhood and she doesn’t mind. As long as the people she love are there with her she no longer needs to be worried.


Months have passed by and things haven’t gone the way she wanted them to. Liana and her boyfriend have been dealing with complications. They have been on and off for quite a while and after the third time they dated they broke up she knew that it was never meant to be. Things also got worst with her family fighting over money. Her grades in school continued to be decreasing. Her teachers know she’s a good and nice student. They just don’t understand why her grades are so low, they tried giving her tutoring, but the only thing that is a problem is the transportation. Since she lives out of town, they only drop u off at the closest elementary school to your home. So she tries her best in classes, even if it means trying to ignore her friends.
Liana hasn’t been herself since the last break up. To her he was her everything, but she only broke up with him because he wasn’t acting like the way he was every day. It hurts her more than anything, yet she only did it so that he can clear his mind. She never intended to hurt him, she only thought what was best for him. Day after day she tries getting him off her mind but it seems like wherever she goes or hears it reminds her of him. Even in each of her dreams he’s always there, it’s like a complete nightmare. Except that this morning she finally forgotten about her ex until one of her closest friends brings him up and that’s when hell breaks loose. So she tries talking to him once again, but it was completely useless, the way he was acting was the same reason why she broke up with him in the first place. It kills her inside every time she sees him, but she knows nothing good is going to come out from the awkwardness between them two. So what she tried doing was to make sure he smiles once in awhile.


To Liana it’s only about to see others happy, honestly she can careless about herself. Though, if someone tells her not to do anything to herself then she won’t. She would do anything just to see any person smile, but that might be why she has friends in the first place. They know she would never turn her back on them and would never spread rumors about them. Her whole life she has been loyal to her friends never in her life has she betrayed her friends. The only thing she dislikes is when the people she stood up for would spread rumors and have her friends turn on her. Once that happens she loses trust and respect for that person. What she doesn’t like is when a person would leave all her/his friends to be friends with a person who backstabbed that person.


One day liana asked a girl for her opinion on a paperwork she was writing. When the girl was finished she told her that it was very touching, that it reminded her of someone she once knew. Later on liana was thinking about the conversation she was having with the girl. Then it hit her, she wanted to add people that had similar problems in life to her paperwork. So she thought about how the girl had problems with her ex and wondered if she could add this into her paperwork. Love is just a form of mental derangement, though liana is always stuck on believing what love truly means. Sometimes when a person is in a relationship, they wish they were able to read each other's mind to know how they truly feel. Some girls wonder why they feel so distanced away from the ones they love. That reminded Liana of how she felt when she broke up with her boyfriend. Even though she knows that he’s the one who holds the key to heart no matter what. It’s weird that whenever she’s not with her boyfriend, she feels empty inside. Yet, when their together she can’t wipe the smile off her face.




The worst feeling liana ever experienced in the past was pain. Everytime she lost someone she loved, it was like a knife piercing her heart. She would always blame herself for not being there or able to do anything to help that person. Back then she didn't know how to get rid of the pain within her. So what she did was cry until she no longer was able to describe pain. To liana, now pain was nothing more than a sting of a needle. She doesn't give in to the weakness nor does she expresses or at least try. Unless she shows it as acting, until then she still doesn't believe in such things.the way liana gets stronger is by not giving in or letting pitty things get to her.She wants to be a strong example for the other people she love the most. Though sometimes when she cries herself to sleep is because she’s either being haunted by the past or is struggling not to give in to the pain buried inside.



Liana doesn't really understand when a person tells a person to keep a secret between them,but then goes telling the whole world. Everyone has secrets, but that doesn't mean that you can go running your mouth.Honestly, some people should be careful on who they trust. Liana once knew a girl who’s mother told her a secret as an example to not do the same thing she did as a child. So the child stayed quiet, but knew what her mother was trying to explain to her. Until one day they both got into an argument in front of some guest and the child used that secret against her own mother. Since then, her mother no longer used her passed as an example for her daughter. Never knowing if she’ll use it against her. The point is, if you have a secret to tell, then tell a person you can truly trust. Never tell a person who will only use it as a treat or a gossip. Liana never trust anyone, until then she’ll just keep it to herself.


Everyone says being the only child is the best thing there is to be. Liana never thought that way, she always thought the opposite. She always wanted to grow up being a big sister or a little sister, to her it never mattered. She didn’t care as long as she didn't grow up alone. Yet, unfortunately for her she did, she would've grown up to be a big a big sister, but when she was just a toddler her little sister passed away. Ever since she found out that she actually had a sister and that she wasn't able to grow up with her side by side. She really hated it when people say that they wish to be the only child. Just because they get to be the center of attention and get what they want. To most of the children's and teenagers they don't feel the same as what most kids want. Some are indeed center of attention but some just feel so bored and lonely. For crying out loud the kids who grew up being all alone would do anything just to be with someone to play with. Kids now and days just get annoyed, but little do they know that they should be grateful that they grew up with someone by their side while others didn't.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

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Answer 4

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