Question

These lyrics have been a long time in the making, but just last night I finished the last verse. Let me know what you think. I'm open to both positive and negative feedback.

Answer 1

A voice to follow

Verse 1:

I saw you standing there with your eyes turned heaven-ward
Tears upon your face showed me that something beautiful had occurred
Actions speak louder than words, or so they say.

Still silence was broken by some words I won't forget.
Your voice like a whisper from your heart you said,
"I believe that these things are true, what more can I do."

Chorus:

If you heed these words tonight you'll find
Your heart was true
But if you forget these things you've felt inside
What if they don't come back to you?

It's your choice.
Don't take my words as truth
Follow the voice
of light that will lead you.

Verse 2:

My mind wanders through places that I know and love
These experiences that I don't speak often of
I held them close to my heart
Right from the start

If I forget these precious things that I know now
I pray the feelings and emotions will return somehow
You see, they could never grow old
They're worth much more than gold

Chorus

Answer 2

I think it's very well written(:
I love it

Answer 3

Thank you!

Answer 4

Its well written :) good job as a fellow musician and song writer i give you my praises for sucess

Answer 5

It's really good!

Answer 6

Thanks

Answer 7

Don't we ALL need a voice to follow??
This is really quite perfect, the meaning of it. I mean there is such a majestic feel to it that truly belongs. Every song (both lyrically and musically) would be lost and empty without a feel to base who we are upon.
Whenever I am either asked to critique or collaborate lyrically with someone, I sometimes want to pull my hair out because of the essay's that I write trying to show them the error's of the way they word things, or the way they try to sound like modern/popular artist's, or the way they sometimes basically tell me to "bug off" if I try to help.
But I swear, every time I read yours, there's just nothing wrong for me to find with it!
You have a very fluid and meaningful mind and heart that you put simply and beautifully into words a lot of times, and it's just a treat for me to be able to read them.
I can't wait till I hear it!
Really Tanner, please keep it up! :)

Answer 8

Thank you @Atsie You're well thought out words are much appreciated.

Answer 9

Very nice!

Answer 10

thank you