Help me improve my research paper?

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anonymous · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

@Rushwr

meowimacat · Answer

ok!

meowimacat · Answer

Okay, I read it (i read fast), and you have an excellent first paragraph, It really draws the reader in how you open with a question. There was a place in the first paragraph where I questioned the word choice, and I would probably change it. Its where it said ' The greenhouse effect is the preoccupation of energy released from the earth's surface by carbon dioxide and further gases in the atmosphere, causing the atmosphere to turn out to be very warming.' The last few words are a bit confusing, and If you want some ideas, I could give them to you, or maybe they just confuse me. The rest of the paper is supported by good facts and resources. You did a great job.

anonymous · Answer

you sure thats the only problem?

meowimacat · Answer

I can re read it again. I think I saw a few like, little problems. Ill look.

meowimacat · Answer

It's looking great, you missed a capital letter, unless its not supposed to be capitalized:  how do they agree with each other?. Besides that, your info is on FLEEK!!! In the last paragraph, you say that w/o the greenhouse effect there would be no global warming, but in the paragraph above it it says we need regular greenhouse effect. Maybe you could emphasize on how today the greenhouse effect is NOT normal in your last paragraph, and how we need to steadily maintain it. Wait, nvm, ignore me, I'm trying my hardest but im tired. It is excellent, and I hope you get a good grade :D

anonymous · Answer

@Rushwr

anonymous · Answer

I am now