Question

I wrote a poem, y'all got any thoughts? (:

Answer 1

like the moon,
you came too soon,
I was tanning in the sun,
when you ruined my fun,
now I’m on the ground,
just waiting to be found,
paralyzed,
sterilized,
petrified,
electrified.
leave me,
love me,
don’t ever come back.
I was gonna win the race
when you pulled me off the track.
I saw the finish line,
but fell victim to your crime,
and here I am now
wondering nothing but how
I can love you and loathe you,
hate you and yet want to hold you
if you won’t walk away,
just know that I will . . .
but just for future reference,
this is only a drill.

Answer 2

I like it:)

Answer 3

sounds good do you want more heres one Don’t look for the flaws as you go through life;
And even when you find them,
It is wise and kind to be somewhat blind
And look for the virtue behind them.
For the cloudiest night has a hint of light
Somewhere in its shadows hiding;
It is better by far to hunt for a star,
Than the spots on the sun abiding.

The current of life runs ever away
To the bosom of God’s great ocean.
Don’t set your force ‘gainst the river’s course
And think to alter its motion.
Don’t waste a curse on the universe –
Remember it lived before you.
Don’t butt at the storm with your puny form,
But bend and let it go o’er you.

The world will never adjust itself
To suit your whims to the letter.
Some things must go wrong your whole life long,
And the sooner you know it the better.
It is folly to fight with the Infinite,
And go under at last in the wrestle;
The wiser man shapes into God’s plan
As water shapes into a vessel.
and here is a website to get more poems
http://100.best-poems.net/you-go-through-life.html

Answer 4

Nicely written.

Answer 5

I like that a lot (: @kindness Did you write it or did you get it from that website?

Answer 6

I appreciate that :p @MilanItaly1618 @JoannThomas

Answer 7

No problem I thought it was great

Answer 8

i like it tooooooo

Answer 9

thanks (:

Answer 10

Very well written @kelsey.benton00