Question

Rewrite the paragraph below, correcting any fragments and run-one sentences. Be sure to use correct punctuation. @adrynicoleb

Answer 1

We cannot do the work for you, but if you write it out, then have us check it, we'd love to! :)

Answer 2

So, you're saying if I write it out you'd be willing to help me correct it? :D

Answer 3

@gottennis121

Answer 4

Yup. :D

Answer 5

Okay, give me a few minutes.

Answer 6

Please.

Answer 7

FYI, I won't be on this post, but just tag me and I'll be back in less than 2 minutes. :)

Answer 8

Okay. (:

Answer 9

Take your time. I'm not rushing you. :)

Answer 10

Okay, I will. Thanks

Answer 11

@gottennis121 Hey, I'm not completely finished yet, but I needed to ask a question.

I have a sentence it goes like this "not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep-sea or the changes in their diets." I'm confused on if it needs to be "diets" or just "diet"

Answer 12

It would be diet I believe.

Answer 13

Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin. In the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton. Capture the sun and start the food cycle.


I know that this needs to be fixed, but am not 100% sure how. @gottennis121

Answer 14

Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin in the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton capture the sun and start the food cycle.

Answer 15

Ohh okay, thank you! I haven't finished yet, but that helps a lot.

Answer 16

@adrynicoleb @adrynicoleb u have to respond to ur tags ._.

Answer 17

Uh, why...? There's someone helping...

Answer 18

Yeah, its fine now, I have @gottennis121 helping me.

Answer 19

its just funny because we are good friends and i like to mess with her xD

Answer 20

Wherever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottom dwellers.

Whenever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottom-dwellers. (Does that look right?)

Answer 21

Yup! :)

Answer 22

I know that it said "wherever" but I think it should say "whenever"

Answer 23

It is uncertain what will happen to the rest of the food chain when these bottom-dwellers become extinct.

Does this need to be fixed?

Answer 24

Wherever, whenever, doesn't matter.
No, that is a complete sentence.

Answer 25

Okay, now I just need to show you what I've written.

Answer 26

Scientists report that creatures living in the deep-sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live in the deep-sea. Creatures on the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages, which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientists believe that some species will die out, those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep-sea or about the changes in their diet(s). Scientists estimate that up to ten million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton capture the sun and start the food cycle. Whenever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottom-dwellers. It is uncertain what will happen to the rest of the food chain when these bottom-dwellers become extinct.

Answer 27

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Liv1234
It is uncertain what will happen to the rest of the food chain when these bottom-dwellers become extinct.

Does this need to be fixed?
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)

Actually, instead of "when," put "if" because the extinction isn't a for sure going to happen yet.

Other than that, your rewritten paragraph looks great!

Answer 28

Thanks!

Answer 29

My pleasure! :)

Answer 30

Can you help me with one question please?

Answer 31

Sure, I have to start my essay at the same time, but yes. :)
If you wouldn't mind, it is said for one question per post.

Answer 32

Okay, I'll open a new post, it is a quick one.