Question

new poem feedback please will give medal and fan

Answer 1

Sometimes in life I can feel like I'm swimming
Sinking so far down into the clear blue water, so unreal,
The world outside dissapear a,
The only sound is my heartbeat echoing loudly, distorted,
I float under the water, as my air is running out,
If I could leave this world behined,
If I can stay lost from my problems, and start new,
But my air is now long gone and I begin to kick myself up to the surface for air,
Sputtering and disoriented into the sunlight,
Back to the world....

Answer 2

@sleepyjess
@DullJackel09
@Kitten_is_back

Answer 3

@mustbethestars
@Hope210

Answer 4

This is really good i think some people could relate to this, you are really good at writing.
@afloridagirl

Answer 5

thank you @Osgood

Answer 6

:)

Answer 7

really good

Answer 8

It is a nice poem but there are some spelling and grammatical errors @afloridagirl
If you wish, when you are next online, we can fix them ^-^

Answer 9

Nice poem I like it :)