Question

here's the third chapter of my story (plz give feedback thnx)

Answer 1

He followed Claire as she walked through the hallway...pretty fast. She seems to be in a world of her own, walking as if she were the only person in the world. He also took notice that she seemed to be talking to someone who wasn't even there, he listened to her talk but didn't interrupt.
She then turned around looking at him, then her eyes widen as she realized she was speaking out loud. First thing interesting to write.
"Oh I'm so sorry... I'm... I'm just used to speaking out loud." Claire let out a nervous laugh. Knight nodded his head like he understood... heck he didn't understand jack about it. He never met anyone that talked to themselves, now here was one in front of him and he was really feeling uncomfortable.
"So... I’ll show you to your classes most of the time 'till you get used to the school and know your way around. By the way, why's your name Knight? It's sort of weird. But cool at the same time." Claire asked turning around to face him. Knight shot her a look and a low growl even though he didn't mean to.
"You got a problem with my name?" He asked her. She shook her head no but he didn't believe that. He took a step forward closing the distance between them, he could sense her breathing picking up pace. Then a hand landed on his shoulder and twisted him around as a boy's voice spoke up.
"What do you think you're doing! Getting into my sister's face like that?" The newcomer's voice asked... well more like growled at him.
He stared at the boy, he was 'bout the same age as he was. He was wearing a striped shirt with a red tie, his hair was black not blonde like hers. His eyes were light blue but they showed like a blue fiery flame as he stared at him. He didn't even look like he could be her brother! He thought about it. Second thing interesting.
"Nothing, dude." Knight took a step back from the guy when all of a sudden there was a loud ringing and voices left the hall. Claire was soon grabbing his arm and pulling him away from the dude with the black hair claiming to be her brother. Ha! Like he believed that one. Claire dragged him into a room. She spoke to the teacher then looked at him before she left.
The teacher greeted him like any other teacher would then told him to sit down. Many of the other kids looked at him as he walked by, some of the girls blushed and started messing with their hair (like that would get him interested in them). It went like that for the rest of the day, after each class Claire would be at the door waiting for him then she would show him his next class and move on.
The last class of the day took forever, the teacher talked and talked but all he heard was 'do homework', 'project', 'end of term' and mostly anything else didn't matter to him. He might have dozed off a bit too, so when something slammed down on his desk waking him up, he shot up straight and was confused.
"Mr. Knight, do you know what it is that I was talking about?" The teacher asked, judging him.
"Ummm...." He sensed that everyone was staring at him, " 'bout how there’ll be a project at the end of the day?" He really had no idea what the teacher was talking about.
Everyone snickered but the teacher looked at him with disapproval.
"No I was not. It seems like you would like to stay after class and review. Detention... already on your first day too." The teacher made a tusking noise before returning to his desk and written something down. Just great. Third thing that was interesting. Wow this day is going fantastic!

Answer 2

@BigDreams
@Osgood
@JoannThomas

Answer 3

@PillowFace750

Answer 4

@briannaontimeforeal never go invted

Answer 5

menie

Answer 6

so how many chapters are there

Answer 7

this is the third chapter.

Answer 8

this is really good. you should put this on wattpad. you might get more feedback than you would get on OS. do you have all the chapters written? or do you write them everyday?

Answer 9

I write a chapter everyday. (some take longer) and i might get an account on wattpad whatever that is. lol the ones i posted so far have been written for a while now @BigDreams
And so far there are ten chapters @briannaontimeforreal

Answer 10

OK. thx, i will read it

Answer 11

@Ray_Masters

Answer 12

It's amazing x'd i could nvr write like that. GL with the rest completing your book:)

Answer 13

Just logged back on to OS, good job @Ray_Masters !!!! This is real interesting