Two years ago, General Reginald Edward Harry Dyer was forced to retire the army. This retirement happened because of a catastrophic event that led to many deaths and long term suffering. Some victims have to face this pain for the rest of their lives. This is worse than death. Because of this, I believe that it was the right call to make General Dyer retire.
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Two years ago, General Reginald Edward Harry Dyer was forced to retire the army. This retirement happened because of a catastrophic event that led to many deaths and long term suffering. Some victims have to face this pain for the rest of their lives. This is worse than death. Because of this, I believe that it was the right call to make General Dyer retire.
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simplymarie_x · Answer

You posted in the wrong section ^~^

kaylak12345 · Answer

sorry i already had it up so i just  posted it here