Question

tell me if i have a good intro and help me start paragraph 2

Answer 1

Two years ago, on July 17th , General Reginald Edward Harry Dyer was forced to retire the army. This retirement happened because of a catastrophic event that led to many deaths and long term suffering. The massive destruction of a perfect empire was called the Amritsar Massacre. Many say that the cause of the destruction was that he suffered from arteriosclerosis. This statement was proven faulty when he had a brilliant performance at the relief of Thal. In fact, he did not develop the disease until after the massacre occurred. Therefore, he knew what he was doing and was capable of doing it. This chaotic, bloody, madness is the reason that we no longer have a strong empire. Some of these victims have to face pain from this tragic event for the rest of their lives. This is worse than death. Because of this, I believe that it was the right call to make General Dyer retire.

Answer 2

wow

Answer 3

is this good

Answer 4

I'd say its really good

Answer 5

lol

Answer 6

just cut back like 2 senteces because you wanna keep intros breif

Answer 7

do I get a medal?

Answer 8

but i have to write 3 pages or more

Answer 9

This is under the wrong subject

Answer 10

It's pretty good.

Answer 11

lol

Answer 12

Have you thought of writing down why he was in the army in first place or about his life outside/inside the military.

Answer 13

well my assignment is to pretend im in british parliment and say why or why not it was the right call to retire him so i think that might get me off topic lol

Answer 14

Wouldn't that your suppose to write a letter on your thoughts about him retiring?

Answer 15

*mean

Answer 16

your going the right direction though, its just you need to explain how you feel about it and why.

Answer 17

a speech