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Answer 1

Two years ago, on July 17th , General Reginald Edward Harry Dyer was forced to retire the army. This retirement happened because of a catastrophic event that led to many deaths and long term suffering. The massive destruction of a perfect empire was called the Amritsar Massacre. Many say that the cause of the destruction was that he suffered from arteriosclerosis. This statement was proven faulty when he had a brilliant performance at the relief of Thal. In fact, he did not develop the disease until after the massacre occurred. Therefore, he knew what he was doing and was capable of doing it. This chaotic, bloody, madness is the reason that we no longer have a strong empire. Some of these victims have to face pain from this tragic event for the rest of their lives. This is worse than death. Because of this, I believe that it was the right call to make General Dyer retire.
Three years ago on April 13th, many people of India were “unaware of Dyer’s recent ban on public assemblies”(“The Amritsar Massacre”) which was declared a day prior. Because of this, these innocent people gathered in Amritsar, “India’s holy city of the Sikh religion”(“The Amritsar Massacre”), to celebrate Baisakhi. These people were trying to just enjoy their day and then they receive the unexpected. “Dyer arrived at about 5:15 p.m”(“Jalianwala Bagh Massacre”) with his plans to target people without warning. He ordered his riflemen to start firing. The chaotic madness of the “slaughter of nearly 400 persons”(“Source 10”) and wounding about 1,200 people is just too much to be a lesson. As Dyer states, he “wanted to inflict a lesson that could be felt through all India” (“Source 5”). This statement is not what we need in our military.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

Is your essay complete yet? @kaylak12345


I think its quite nice. Good luck on the Independent Semester portfolio I hope mine comes out great as well ^^

Answer 4

lol not yet lol