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Two years ago, on July 17th , General Reginald Edward Harry Dyer was forced to retire the army. This retirement happened because of a catastrophic event that led to many deaths and long term suffering. The massive destruction of a perfect empire was called the Amritsar Massacre. Many say that the cause of the destruction was that he suffered from arteriosclerosis. This statement was proven faulty when he had a brilliant performance at the relief of Thal. In fact, he did not develop the disease until after the massacre occurred. Therefore, he knew what he was doing and was capable of doing it. This chaotic, bloody, madness is the reason that we no longer have a strong empire. Some of these victims have to face pain from this tragic event for the rest of their lives. This is worse than death. Because of this, I believe that it was the right call to make General Dyer retire.
Three years ago on April 13th, many people of India were “unaware of Dyer’s recent ban on public assemblies”(“The Amritsar Massacre”) which was declared a day prior. Because of this, these innocent people gathered in Amritsar, “India’s holy city of the Sikh religion”(“The Amritsar Massacre”), to celebrate Baisakhi.They were trying to just enjoy their day and then the unexpected happens . “Dyer arrived at about 5:15 p.m”(“Jalianwala Bagh Massacre”) with his plans to target people without warning. He ordered his riflemen to start firing. A junior officer asked,”shouldn't we issue a warning? Dyer says stiffly, they've had their warning. No meetings”(“Source 5”). This is when shots are fired and all you can hear is the sounds of “a mounted machine gun, buzzing noisily through the streets of Amritsar”(“Source 5”). As Dyer states, he “wanted to inflict a lesson that could be felt through all India” (“Source 5”). The chaotic madness of the “slaughter of nearly 400 persons”(“Source 10”) and wounding about 1,200 people is just too much to be a lesson. This is not what we need in our military. We support bravery and protection, not pure violence.
Dyer went too far for this event to be considered a mistake. As some people say, he made “an error of judgement and was in a difficult position”(“Source 9”). That was more than just an error. People died from his “error”. It wasn't only a few people either. It was 400 people and 1,200 wounded. He hurt and changed the lives of these people. You can not “recognize terrorism as part of your weapon”(“Source 8”). What good does that do to our empire? These people were not bothering anyone. They have a life, too.“ Are you going to keep your hold on India by terrorism, racial humiliation and subordination, and frightfulness(“Source 8”)? This is outrageous. Dyer is not even from Britain which makes it worse. He is from Pakistan. This means that he was practically killing his own people. He didn't even care about the tragedies. He just wanted to cause something “dramatic which might give him a final chance to make his name” (“Source 3”). He does have a name now. It's not a good name and surely doesn't change the fact that he ruined the lives of innocent people.

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You're Welcome Ps:I loved the way you started the essay!

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