I need some feedback on a song I just made that is called Cold as Ice.

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4everaddicted2anime · Answer

No one there to touch, to feel,
To hold every second it strikes me
In this hellish agony

You brought me out, but were never there to comfort me, comfort me, comfort me
Don’t remember how you could have made me this way, this way

There’s ice spilling from my voice
From the deepest pit of my heart
There’s ice spilling from my voice
Loneliness is my only art

Ah, ah ah, ah ah 
Ah, ah ah, ah ah

Think you can help, I’m unimpressed 
Chop away at that iceberg 
I’ll make it so you have nothing left

You brought me out, but were never there to comfort me, comfort me, comfort me
Don’t remember how you could have made me this way, this way

There’s ice spilling from my voice
From the deepest pit of my heart
There’s ice spilling from my voice
Loneliness is my only art

Ah, ah ah, ah ah 
Ah, ah ah, ah ah
Ah, ah ah, ah ah
Ah, ah ah, ah ah

Formerly, I was in the light
Oh the way I kept the ice in my chest
Now I have been pushed too far
Time to release all my feiry 

There’s ice spilling from my voice
From the deepest pit of my heart
There’s ice spilling from my voice
Loneliness is my only art

There’s ice spilling from my voice
From the deepest pit of my heart
There’s ice spilling from my voice
Loneliness is my only art

Ah, ah ah, ah ah 
Ah, ah ah, ah ah
Ah, ah ah, ah ah
Ah, ah ah, ah ah

4everaddicted2anime · Answer

@theriverspirit @Alexa_carson24 @RandomeQuestions @AliMaeHemmings

4everaddicted2anime · Answer

@NekoMatt @anthony1914 @MathMusician

anitas. · Answer

great! :D

obviouslynerdy · Answer

I Love It, Do You Think That You Will Become A Singer, I Think You Should. Or A Song  Writer

janeesssaaaa · Answer

wooooowww this song was amazing *clap*clap

aulyanchuk · Answer

this would sound really good with acoustic guitar and drums, and back up singers, It kinda sounds like a taylor swift songs but without the ah, ah, ah. But with guitar it would sound really good,  My opinion.

4everaddicted2anime · Answer

@ObviouslyNerdy I think I might become a song writer (I can't sing; my voice is terrible)

4everaddicted2anime · Answer

Thank you @AnitaS. @ObviouslyNerdy @Janeesssaaaa

theriverspirit · Answer

Its p good. Some parts I didn't think flowed well but thats just how I was singing it probably. You should write music for it.

paki · Answer

amazing words... i like it...

hyperpiper · Answer

$\color{magenta}{AYEEEE !!!Great!}$

youngstudier · Answer

Good job! ^_^