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sparklyme · Answer

When I was suffering,
He held me tight.
When I fell down,
He pulled me up.
When I cried,
He understood.
When I needed to talk,
He listened to me.
When I felt like dying,
He helped me survive.
When I loved him,
He loved me back.

They grabbed my arms,
Said I was wrong.
That I needed to leave,
Not giving me a chance to say goodbye.
They pushed me over
The border,
Saying I needed to go back home.
I tried to tell them this was my home,
But they wouldn’t listen.
When they took me away,
They broke my heart.
They pulled me from him,
The love of my life.
When they broke my heart,
He wasn’t there to pull me up.

sparklyme · Answer

Oops...I just realized this is in the wrong section...

foreverandalways13 · Answer

its amazing!

sparklyme · Answer

@foreverandalways13 really? thanks! do have any ideas of how I can make it better?

smartnerd1111 · Answer

this is good but i reccoment posting this in the writing section

sparklyme · Answer

yea, i did it by mistake. im gonna move it now to writing, just so you guys know!

minecraftgeek5 · Answer

Wow that's really great! but yeah it probably would have been better on a different section ^_^ but that's wonderful!

sparklyme · Answer

im deleting this now. it is now in the writing section. please comment there!

anitas. · Answer

it s beutiful <34343