Question

I had to write a poem for school and this is what I wrote. Please tell me (please be honest!!!) what you think!

Answer 1

They Broke My Heart

When I was suffering,
He held me tight.
When I fell down,
He pulled me up.
When I cried,
He understood.
When I needed to talk,
He listened to me.
When I felt like dying,
He helped me survive.
When I loved him,
He loved me back.

You grabbed my arms,
Said I was wrong.
That I needed to leave,
Not giving me a chance
to say goodbye.
You pushed me over
The line,
Saying I needed to go back home.
I tried to tell you this was my home,
But you wouldn’t listen.
When you took me away,
You broke my heart.
You pulled me from him,
The love of my life.
You made us suffer,
We couldn’t survive.

Answer 2

lol again I say that's awesome!!! you can do a poem way better than I can XD

Answer 3

@Minecraftgeek5 Thanks a million! I feel like it's really bad and could be much better...

Answer 4

that almost (almost it didn't) brought me to tears and I'm a 16 year old boy who doesn't cry much lol also I feel like that came from your own personal experience and tbh I have had a experience very similar to your poem and I think that is why it was so great to me hehe

Answer 5

Thanks. You have no idea how much that means to me!

Answer 6

Good job ^.^

Answer 7

Sparklyme, this poem would work better as a song, I would say. Good job.

Answer 8

@Idealog @YoungStudier thank you so much! Idealog: that's a great idea!
Thanks everyone for your input!