Can someone proofread my essay?

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xxdragoonxx · Answer

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cloverloveee16 · Answer

Your paper is very good. Although, I think you should have made your conclusion a tad bit longer. Put some of the introduction in there. Revise!

allys88 · Answer

Your essay is really good. Make sure you are writing in all present tense. Also, you should add an intro paragraph just to summarize quick points in what you are going to talk about. I agree with the answer above, I would make the conclusion paragraph a little longer too. Finally, you should include some specific quotes from journals and reliable sources to back up your argument. Just make sure to use quotes and cite the source.