Question

First rap
i met a girl 2 years ago first when i saw first her i felt like she is the best women in the world then when I got to know her she had a problem with her dad. The days started to pass by and we fell in love as a deep as the sea she wanted to commit suicide but I did not wanted her to do it we argued and argued but when she committed suicide I felt it is my fault because I could not explain and now i am depressed looking sad everyday, i cant sleep at fluttering nights why did she do this to me she was so good but so bad.

Answer 1

OMG I love your rap! You did really good. Keep up the good work! <3 :)

Answer 2

Please retain from using inappropriate language @Adi3

Answer 3

sorry man

Answer 4

love it!!!!!!

Answer 5

can you help me make it better?

Answer 6

1st:Dats sad like really really sad i would ask if it really happened but nah
2nd:Nice song Bro

Answer 7

@imqwerty

Answer 8

Nice!

Answer 9

I can't hear the flow of the rap, looks to me like a paragraph u wrote

Answer 10

ik, i need some improvement

Answer 11

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