Question

i did a little but can some one help me fix my essay im kinda bad at writing

Answer 1

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Games are good; no matter what you say there fun. some are easier then others. their relaxing, you can let out your stress, and ect. but the mane reason is to have fun meet people and get away from life; ill tell you how it gets you friends have fun and get away. lets say it was a hard day at work your coffee was spicy, the person who got you your coffee spilled yours on a stack of paper work and that's how you got the spicy coffee as it was the extra one, and last but not least a bird pooped on you cause why not. you get cleaned up, you go out to the parking lot. you get in your car and realize one of your tires are flat. so you take the bus. you have to wait a hour be for it comes to your work street. you get on the bus and there's one seat open and its next to some one with a cold, you sit down next to them and they sneeze in your hand you open up your brief case and find the bottle of hand soup you open it and try to squeeze a drop out of it but nothing comes out. the bus stops you get off and you walk the rest of the way home. its 9:00 PM and you get inside your home and plop on the couch as its the closest piece of furniture to the door. You grab the remote and turn on your TV nothing good is on at that time of night, so you look around the room and just then it hits you, you have a Xbox, PSP, PC, and a play station 4 but its at the shop with the PSP. you jump up turn your PC on and you get on team speak or what ever you have order a pizza and get on a game relax, talk to your friends, get to level 50 on what ever game your on you make a new friend that lives in your area you defeat that boss and feel like your in your happy place. games are amazing they can help you by making you feel like you accomplished some thing so great, or when you have to take care of your pet in game or what ever the case might be you can do literally any thing inside of a game and that's why games are important, not stupid, not bad, and for sure not some thing you want to forbid or never try.

Answer 2

@Elsa213

Answer 3

@CandyCove

Answer 4

@AloneS

Answer 5

@Ms-Brains

Answer 6

Alright so you need me to just read it over and what? Let you know if there are in errors in grammar? or spelling?

Answer 7

yeah like can you copy the ad in your chat box and fix what needs to be fixed

Answer 8

Alright 1 secc :3

Answer 9

thank you so mich

Answer 10

make these changes and then I'll help you some more. http://prntscr.com/bar6eu The red and underlined parts need to be reworded or elaborate more .

Answer 11

ok ty

Answer 12

Np :3

Answer 13

@Ms-Brains im confused i dont get how im suppose to reword this

Answer 14

Okay,
Original Ex.) Games are good.
Re worded Ex.) Video games are great, in my personal opinion playing video games is a wonderful experience. Each game is a new challenge.

^^ I re worded it and I elaborated more. That's what they want in essays.

Answer 15

ok ty

Answer 16

How is it going so far?