Question

New Poem. Thoughts? having a little trouble on the third line of the first stanza.

Walking across a frozen lake
One cold winters day
Snowflakes falling from the sky
to the ground where they shall stay

Then comes in the spring
The rains that wash away
All the snow that came
One cold winters day

Answer 1

I think it's good

Answer 2

thanks

Answer 3

It's nice, I like the feeling it gives. You could add something about you know, the way your breath leaves your mouth like a cloud or something. XD I'm just trying things ;)

Answer 4

thanks