"Take Me Away"

Take me away
Drown my sorrows;
With the sound of your voice
Make me whole,
Fill in my empty soul

Let me forget,
Trade my memories;
Old for new

Take me away
Let me live,
Show me how,
Teach me to breathe
Outside of you

Heal these open wounds,
Love my broken heart,
Now breathe into me,
Don't let me fall apart.

@Atsie

Question

"Take Me Away" 

Take me away 
Drown my sorrows; 
With the sound of your voice 
Make me whole, 
Fill in my empty soul 

Let me forget, 
Trade my memories; 
Old for new 

Take me away 
Let me live, 
Show me how, 
Teach me to breathe 
Outside of you 

Heal these open wounds, 
Love my broken heart, 
Now breathe into me, 
Don't let me fall apart. 

@Atsie

atsie · Answer

TO be very honest, I really cannot find much bad with this poem at all! You have a very deep sense of your own words that is in fact very surprising to me but quite exciting! You express vulnerability in your wishes so simply and I think that is another aspect that makes the poem very attractive to a reader.I highly encourage you to keep writing because the world is lacking literal talent and gaining "stare at your phone all day" talent more so and we need to bring creativity out as much as possible and let it shine! So please, keep it up! :)

alliekat01 · Answer

Thank you @Atsie! You're awesome and very sweet!! :)

atsie · Answer

You're welcome! My pleasure! ^.^ @AllieKat01