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In Romeo and Juliet, the two main characters have internal and external conflicts. Two of the internal conflicts are, at the beginning Romeo is in love with Rosaline who proceeds to reject him and whether or not to live without the other. One more is Romeo and Juliet are enemies. Two of the external conflicts are Romeo’s banishment and their families are enemies. Another one is Juliet’s parents are trying to force her into a marriage and Romeo killing Tybalt, Juliet’s loved cousin. On to explaining the internal conflicts.

Answer 1

As I stated, Romeo and Juliet have internal and external conflicts. At the beginning of the play Romeo is in love with Rosaline who proceeds to reject him. He then proceeds to meet Juliet whom he falls in love with. What Romeo is not aware of at first is that he and Juliet are enemies. Towards the end they have to decide whether or not they want to live without the other. Now to explaining the external conflicts.
One of the external conflict is Romeo’s banishment. Juliet has to figure out how she is going to handle his banishment. The reason Romeo got banished was because he killed Tybalt, Juliet’s loved cousin. The next one is the fact that their families are enemies. The last one is that her parents are trying to force her into a marriage that she doesn’t want to be in so she can be faithful to Romeo.
As a resolution to the first few internal conflicts Romeo and Juliet go married secretly. Because Juliet did not want to be unfaithful to Romeo, she faked her death. She bought a sleeping potion that made ALL signs of life leave her. When Romeo found out, he bought poison. He went to her grave and killed himself. When Juliet saw what he had done, she took his dagger and killed herself.
Romeo and Juliet face and resolve two types of conflicts. Those conflicts are known as internal and external conflicts. The internal ones start at the beginning of the play when you first meet Romeo and Juliet and go untill the end of the play. The exact same thing goes for the external ones also.

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Answer 2

At the beginning of the 3rd paragraph, you need to revise the sentence "One of the external conflict is Romeo's banishment" to "One of the external conflicts are Romeo's banishment" You will also need to add a comma at "As a resolution to the first few internal conflicts, Romeo and Juliet get married secretly." Besides that, it is a very well written statement! Great job!! ^-^