Question

I need feed back on this poem quickly! Will fan and medal!!!!! What should I name this?

Is it all worth it?
The blood, the pain, the shedding of tears.
Or grieving with you peers,
About those lost splits, and weary feet.
Yet still, you do it for the cheers.

The lights shine on you while you flitter and flutter,
Like a bee dancing in the wind.
The audience is but a clutter,
Of smiling faces and bright eyes.

For this you do it,
Those bright, happy faces
That shine back at you
And wait for you to say,
"I did it."
And you did,
You made their day.

Answer 1

Bright Autumn ((Dont ask))

Answer 2

Good poem but correction on "you peers" for "your peers"

Maybe instead of flutter , flatter might be better?
The line "the audience is but a clutter" kinda sounds like a fragment so maybe redit as "The audience becomes a cluttered crowd , of smiling faces and bright eyes"

Up to you to make these changes!
For the name.. maybe call it ..

Pain during Autumn
Pain , gain , and a little more happiness
Bright faces , shredding tears
Smiling faces with shredding tears
Sunshine and pain

These are my ideas and thoughts , tag me for any questions or concerns on my answer , thanks

Answer 3

Maybe Painful Pirouettes? Idk. I love how you convey the dedication that dance requires. (Most people don't realize that on pointe your feet do sometimes bleed...) Down in the Writing group we love to read all of your poems! Ooh, maybe Pain, Pointe, Buns, and Brightness? I'm not in a creative mood...

Answer 4

Gracefully suffering? Since ballerinas are graceful while they dance and hide their true feelings of their body

Answer 5

Breaking pointe
Bleeding through the dance
Dolor Dance
Tutu agony
Grueling passion