Question

Please be honest about what you think of this poem I wrote.

Answer 1

They Broke My Heart

When I was suffering,
He held me tight.
When I fell down,
He pulled me up.
When I cried,
He understood.
When I needed to talk,
He listened to me.
When I felt like dying,
He helped me survive.
When I loved him,
He loved me back.

You grabbed my arms,
Said I was wrong.
That I needed to leave,
Not giving me a chance
to say goodbye.
You pushed me over
The line,
Saying I needed to go back home.
I tried to tell you this was my home,
But you wouldn’t listen.
When you took me away,
You broke my heart.
You pulled me from him,
The love of my life.
You made us suffer,
We couldn’t survive.

Answer 2

Its great all i would say would say would be a little more rhymes

Answer 3

Like saldis said I would suggest adding more rhymes but overall you did a good job. :)

Answer 4

@saldis @Hope210 thank you both for the feedback!

Answer 5

You are welcome