Question

Here is a video game rap I am working on. It's still in progress, but feedback so far?

Answer 1

Dark Souls 3 Rap

Verse 1:
A fire left to die,
Ashes frozen in time,
Embers remained,
Just a spark yet not a flame,
and just when all hope is lost,
There rises one man,
To pay that heavy cost.

The unkindled warrior,
Champion of ash,
You must rise from the dark,
and kick some serious retrice
Leave em as shattered as glass,
with broken bones,
fresh scars,
and nightmares that won't pass,
before your spells cast,
leave em as untouchable,
like at the lower half of India's caste.

Chorus:
As I raise my flask,
I rip the mask,
off of my opponents,
it's an easy task.


Verse 2:
I stab and slash,
stomp and mash,
until I get to the place,
Me? Lose?,
I assure you it's not the case,
If you disagree with me,
I might get a mite ugly,
Lacerate or strangulate,
I always earn a victory,
bullpellettery,
that's all I see,
on the behalf of opponents,
that I cut down with ease,
so move out of my way,
cause this dark soul has lived it's final day.

Answer 2

@DullJackel09

Answer 3

DUDE THATS AWESOME!!!!

Answer 4

I GOT TO GET A COPY I GOT ACCEPTED AT UMG: UNIVERSAL MUSIC GROUP I CAN HELP U COME OUT WITH A BEAT FOR IT I AM THINKING SOMETHING CLOSE TO ELDER SCROLLS

Answer 5

Bars @Zyi6 ironically im almost finished with my dark souls 3 rap i like what you came up with so far that indian line though XD

Answer 6

i might get a mite ugly?

Answer 7

i think he meant bit homie

Answer 8

couldn't have done it better myself! great job.

Answer 9

great work dude

Answer 10

pretty good

Answer 11

^copy

Answer 12

OMG dude stop with that

Answer 13

That's awesome!!