Question

grammar check plzz?

Answer 1

Who are you?
I am Muhammad Talha and I am currently studying in electro-mechanical technician at Sheridan. I choose this program because I am interested in learning about mechanics and electricity. I believe after graduation from this 3-year program it'll help me finding a good job in the future. My hobby is to play Cricket as I am a huge fan of cricket players, I have been playing this sport when I was five years old.
Where are you from?
I grew up in a city where the education was not easy to get because the schools were expensive at that time, but still, my parents never stopped paying for my finical amounts. They always inspire me to get an education. As of now, I am working hard on my dreams even though the journey was not easy to reach.
Your Sheridan Journey:
I heard so many good things about Sheridan, things like this college does not only teach students about getting knowledge, it even helps them get a real experience and learning about new things. The program which I was interested in also enroll in this college which makes it easy to set up with this college. As far as my journey comes, I am still working hard on it and the Sheridan teaching was helping me out by teaching new things so far I learned the proper way of presenting anything and dealing with people.
Your Inspiration:
The most inspirational person in my life is Muhammad Ali Jinnah also known as Quid-e-Azam. He was born on December, 25th, 1876 in Karachi, Pakistan. Everyone has a dream, but Quaid-e-Azam's dream was separate from anyone else. He had a dream that Indian Muslims should have their states, and he started his career as a great lawyer, but after that, he started politics for the rise of the Indian Muslims. He encourages people by his speech and wrote many quotes to inspire the people that one day we will get a new country known as Pakistan. He had a lot of struggle for making Pakistan, and also his sister Fatima Jinnah helped him along his way. I admire him because the way he made a new country for the Indian Muslim in a difficult time and situation hats off to him for his great work. Also, the another thing which I learn from him is that never give up your dreams.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

@brittanyrolfe are you there?

Answer 4

My name is Muhammad Talha and I am currently studying in electro-mechanical technician at Sheridan. I choose this program because I am interested in learning about mechanics and electricity. I believe after graduation from this 3-year program it'll help me finding a good job in the future. My hobby is to play Cricket as I am a huge fan of cricket players, I have been playing this sport when I was five years old.

Answer 5

That is what I would put for your first paragraph
It actually looks pretty good.

Answer 6

Second paragraph: I grew up in a city where the education was not easy to get because the schools were expensive at that time. My parents supported me and helped pay for my education. They were also the ones to inspire me to further my education. As of now, I am working hard to achieve my dreams.

Answer 7

Third paragraph: I heard so many good things about Sheridan, things like this college does not only allow students to achieve a good education but it helps obtain real experience and learn about new things. The program which I am interested in also offered through this college which could make my trasition easier. As far as my journey goes, I am still working hard and Sheridan teaching is helping me by teaching me how to properly present and deal with people.

Answer 8

And your fourth paragraph looks good.

Answer 9

ok thanks a lot

Answer 10

I am Muhammad Talha and I am currently studying to be an electro-mechanical technician at Sheridan. I chose this program because I am interested in learning about mechanics and electricity. I believe after graduating from this 3 year program, it will help me find a good job in the future. My hobby is playing Cricket. I have been playing this sport since I have been 5 years old.
Where are you from?
I grew up in a city where getting an education was hard to get. It was expensive at the time and gave me a hard time because of the money but my parents wanted me to get an education so they never gave up and helped me out. I am working hard to reach and achieve my dreams.
Your Sheridan Journey:

Answer 11

ur first paragraph needs more work on it because what they are asking is WHO ARE YOU not why did you pick the program or ur hobby. You add ur name, age, dream job, brief description of hobbies or sports, and other

Answer 12

if this is what you are giving ur professor or something i would recommend answering the question specifically and not all over the place

Answer 13

you put to many ideas in the first para

Answer 14

it pretty much told anyone reading it what you are talking about but you are only being asked one question and that is WHO ARE YOU so just write the paragraph as if you are introducing urself and giving them a brief description of ur life till now

Answer 15

add only one or two sentences of the program while talking about ur dream job

Answer 16

it would hlp if you told me what kind of essay this is and who you are writing to ( ur professor or a college u want to be accepted in

Answer 17

thanks you

Answer 18

np