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Do I have to correct anything? Are there any errors? Is everything good?

Answer 1

Let There Be Dark

The darkness affects our lives in many ways. Think about how different and less enjoyable our lives would be without the darkness of the night. In his article "Let There Be Dark" Paul Bogard builds an argument to persuade his audience that natural darkness should be preserved.

Life contains brightness and darkness. The world depends on the time of day. Without time, there will not be a darkness. According to the text, “Every religious tradition has considered darkness invaluable for a soulful life, and the chance to witness the universe has inspired artists, philosophers and everyday stargazers since time began.” (Paul Bogard, p. #5) This shows that certain people consider darkness to have several different meanings.

There was a time when I experienced what the author of the article did. Traveling with my parents across the Nevada night sky away from any unnatural light, I could appreciate the beauty of the earth, raw with the stars twinkling. The sky was untainted by the murkiness that would usually smother it when above cities. According to the text, "In a world awash with electric light, St. John of the Cross could not have offered us the wisdom from his "dark night of the soul." And how would Van Gogh have given the world his "Starry Night"? Who knows what this vision of the night sky might inspire in each of us, in our children or grandchildren?" (Paul Bogard, p. #5) This shows that …

Studies from both the article and outside sources have deemed that us humans are also experiencing effects from the unnatural lighting. Animals, too, have been effected. According to the text, "It doesn't have to be this way. Light pollution is readily within our ability to solve, using new lighting technologies and shielding existing lights. Already, many cities and towns across North America and Europe are changing to LED streetlights, which offer dramatic possibilities for controlling wasted light." (Paul Bogard, p. #7) This shows that …

Taking these examples into consideration you can see that Paul Bogard's article provides a solid argument as to why preserving natural darkness is important. Although, it may feel annoying at times, the darkness is something that is treasured by many, whether it be for religious reasons, health, or just plain comfort.

Answer 2

@Zeronknight Are there any errors that I need to correct or delete?

Answer 3

Looks like a good piece of work to my naive eye. I've looked at it and seen maybe 3 things that may need looking at.

para 1 ... life ... for "our lives"
para 4 ... we ... for "us".
"this shows that ... " - what does it show ?

I agree with the thrust of the text. Many people today are concerned about "light pollution" - perhaps technology is "endlessly bedazzling" us ?
Well done you for the writing.
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Answer 4

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Answer 5

This is a great piece of work that completely brings across the point of it. There are a few punctuation errors and as @osprey said, those would be recommended changes. I think your thesis is not quite clear though in the introduction paragraph.

Answer 6

@ilovemath14 things are looking good for your work ...
@OtherWorldly
I think your thesis is not quite clear though in the introduction paragraph.
Maybe bedazzled by LIGHT POLLUTION ?????