Question

Can someone please proofread my argumentative essay for English 1020?

Answer 1

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Sure! Can you attach your essay as a file?

Answer 2

it's not yet finish, i just have to have 4 full pages by tomorrow

Answer 3

Ah, I see. I was about to ask if you had introductory and conclusion paragraphs. XD
Overall, I see no fault in it. Excellent use of sources! I like how you made it personal by using "I" in context.
As for it not being finished, does this also include that the Works Cited page is incomplete? :)

Answer 4

Yes im doing the works cited page last. But what is attached is all i have concerning the pages for tomorrow

Answer 5

Just a comment on a sentence on the 4th paragraph:

"As with any school, there are always going to be the kids in class that listen and do as the teachers tell them, and then there are always going to be the kids who do not listen to anything that is taught to them."

I would simplify this, so it doesn't sound repetitive. :)

Answer 6

okay thank you so much! anything else? i really need to get a good grade on this essay so i can get an A in the class. are there any points that you think i may drift away from the subject or anything? she says i can be bad about that sometimes and tend to go on "rants" lol

Answer 7

good job

Answer 8

@alanawood98 and tend to go on "rants" lol Please feel free to "rant on, eloquently". After all, it IS what most other people do, isn't it ?
You've picked some big subject to got "argumentative essay" about ! Good on you and good luck. I see you have plenty of help.

Answer 9

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