Question

will someone comment some points i left out i need to make this essay better

Answer 1

Callie Hunsicker
Mrs Mascagni
English 4
9 March 2017

Why Should Students Have To Dress In Uniform
Students should have to dress in a uniform because dressing in regular clothes will judge other. On what they can afford and what they can’t. Being in uniform will cause less drama between other Students. Dressing in uniform is the best choice for schools right at this moment. Less drama less problems in school which would make a lot of kids happier in school and not so depressed.We should dress in uniform because it will cause less problems in our school between students.
I understand dressing in regular clothes may be what students want so they can express themselves but they can still express themselves in uniform to. Kids now and days think that uniforms are the worse thing on earth but they're not, it's just the perspective on them they think that but it’s how you imagine it. Like me personally I imagine it not being so bad because we are all wearing the same thing no matter what store it came from people can’t judge us on what were wearing when they are wearing the same thing.Judging is overrated people shouldn't do it because you never know what that person is going through that day or in their life, and you definitely shouldn't do it over clothes and brands. Some students can't afford high and expensive brands and they shouldn't be judged on that because it is not there fault. Some students like my personally are not that fortunate to afford the high and expensive clothes like some can only afford walmart not aeropostale school uniforms. People can't what they can afford not what other people want them to get.
People judge based on shoes now because that's the only thing they have to judge on like who cares if they came from walmart,mall,shoe carnival,etc. Care about yourself worry about yourself. People judge on jackets that we wear with our school uniform because we can wear any kind of jacket just not gotta wear school related or color pull over and sweatshirt and hoodie. People judge off the brand of jacket like is it a cheap brand is it expensive? Who cares by you love yourself. Uniforms are the best it only last a few years then you're in college and don’t have to worry about uniform you also go back to the judging standard in college were people judge on shoes,pants,shirt,jacket,etc.
We should have to wear uniforms so people don't judge us based on what were wearing or how u wear it.People shouldn't judge us on that at all. This is why i think we should wear uniform, so people won't judge us based on what we're wearing because they are wearing the same thing.

Answer 2

@SkyVoltage43 @Allison @Justin234 @Warriorz13

Answer 3

Okay in the first sentence there is a small typo.

Answer 4

Change "Students should have to dress in a uniform because dressing in regular clothes will judge other. On what they can afford and what they can’t." to the following "
Students should have to dress in a uniform because dressing in regular clothes will cause others to judge peers based on what they can afford and what they can't afford."

Answer 5

I'd change the title to: Why Students Should Wear School Uniform

Answer 6

that has to be the title @Allison

Answer 7

Do what Warriorz said, too.

Answer 8

Okay then ignore what I suggested

Answer 9

okay

Answer 10

Hmmm Callie, can you just medal me, and I am going to send you a revised version of this essay on Gmail?

Answer 11

okay thx

Answer 12

Of course.

Answer 13

Either than what Warriorz said eh its good

Answer 14

4th line you need to lower case students and there is also one to many spaces i think

Answer 15

it has to be double spaced @SkyVoltage43 and yeah idk what it was during but it captialized alot of letter at the first of the line

Answer 16

I got this guys ^_^ I am a not so pro, but I am a loser but I CAN DO DIS

Answer 17

hmmmmmm

Answer 18

Callie shoot me a quick email.

Answer 19

I cant find yours

Answer 20

whats urs?

Answer 21

There you go Sky, now you can have it to lol

Answer 22

done XD

Answer 23

O-O

Answer 24

i feel speacial

Answer 25

You must feel special if you spell like that x'D

Answer 26

its my school email! so nothing bad on it lol i got 3 emails a personall college and highschool

Answer 27

lol ik i speel bad

Answer 28

XD

Answer 29

YEW ISH PURPLE!

Answer 30

lol about time

Answer 31

lol by the time you got purple i got 3 accounts in green XD

Answer 32

ik babe lol

Answer 33

And the savagery continue... -_-

Answer 34

Wrong subject. o: